Estrangement

Exquisite here in earth scented rainlight
our skin pale and steamed clean
gazes careening into each other
like a traffic accident.

Your estrangement is entanglement
in the quieting curls of your snarled brainworms
You are mired in your mind.

Mine is engulfment in rain that turns river
that turns ocean
and I turn island.

But today
I melt into you at the delta.

And maybe your spiraling ferns have begun
or will begin
to unfurl.

Reviews

[AquaWater5674]

Magical Play with words..
Enchanting..

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Lovely imagery and way of expressing yourself. You had a great feeling throughout that was as great as the imagery. Tyfs!

[CD Campbell]

I like how the words and phrases crash into each other "like a traffic accident" . This piece is very chaotic, but I feel and see the knot that ties it all together. Don't take too long to write another. You've been missed. CD

[M. Shepherd]

Thank you CD that means a lot to me :) I will get to work posting more of what I've been working on lately and I miss you all too, I'll be visiting soon.

[W.k.kortas]

As the wise jacob noted, the use of metaphor is top-shelf stuff. It's creativity and construction working hand-in-hand, and the results are first-rate.

[M. Shepherd]

Thank you Ken :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are so good...the metaphors are excellent...turning from river to ocean to island...

and his estrangement as he pulls away...in his own mind.

really like the last two lines in the first stanza..."careening into each other like a traffic accident"
i always like those driving references.

j.

[M. Shepherd]

Thank you jacob, much appreciated!

[. serah .]

~ very pretty poetry... if it were a piece of jewellery, i think it would be a rather quaint but exceptional trinket... lighting up the mysterious alleys of a yin and yang equation like a firefly... and somehow bringing the two closer by wiping away bits and pieces of an uncomfortable distance... maybe the kind of emotional proximity that the narrator aspires for will ultimately be possible...

[M. Shepherd]

Oh man serah your review is poetry it seeps from your pores. Such a pleasure to receive compliments from the likes of a poet such as yourself. :)

[. serah .]

~ thank you for the compliment, dear M. ... your words inspired mine... :)