my heart

my heart is gone it won't be the same, no one will love like i loved you, you took my love and gave me hate. if i had to choose to love you and die i would pick the 2nd one, because i dont want your hate any more. you gave me to much hate, i cant take it any more. i dont know where my love went, but i dont care i dont want love any more.

Reviews

[Mission: Fiction]

I'm not sure about the grammar issues in this poem? Are the I's written as i's on purpose? Also, I think this poem may need some more imagery to flesh it out some more and to give it depth. Maybe you could say: "Your hate filled me with rage, heated my soul like a hot air balloon."
. . . or something along those lines.

[Chelsey]

awwwww :( i sorry hun
this poem is depressing for me but idk about anyone else

[Jennifer]

nice write i would to pick the 2nd one