Smiling at life

Seeing life as it is

Like a ray of light, like a drop of rain,
I arrived here without  a dot of stain.

 When did I start worrying about,
each and everything here? 

Why did I even think about 
changing this beautiful sphere?

I was happy with the joy and
 happy with the sorrow,

But as I grew, I thought about 
what  more to borrow?

I wish I could be that drop of rain,
be that ray of light, again,

smiling at life, and making others smile. 

Author's Note

Just a beginner in poetry.Please guide with encouragements and constructive criticism

Reviews

[Zyle Christian William ..]

I think this is a great poem! I think you will find that all poets have a unique voice for poetry and thus nothing is inherently going to be wrong with your poetry but there will always be ways to improve. Finding your voice and evolving it is an ongoing adventure that you will embark upon for the rest of your life. This is beautiful and thank you for sharing!

[manju menon]

Thanks a lot for the kind words...will certainly try to find my voice and evolve...and thank you for pointing out the spelling error in my other poem.Have corrected it...Thanks a ton

[Zyle Christian William Cook]

Of course! It was a pleasure reading!

[M P Ramesh]

Manju,
Hope is a vision on which the poet/poetess rely up on to fathom the inner beauty. But the matter is that they can find out this sense even at the time of hardship. That makes them different from the journalists/professors/literary mafia/literary agents/so called art entrepreneurs. I find and am happy that you deserve a membership among the poor class, but rich aesthetic world. You can turn as drop of rain as well as ray of light at a time. Always immersed in nature .Be in love with nature, it an art and a science too. Only those who have surpassed the stigma can produce something new. It is evident in history. The issue is that those will be otiose and face ostracism in every manner.Unbearable it is. But inevitable. Writing is painful. Readers need that pain for joy.
carry on.................


M P Ramesh

[manju menon]

Thanks a lot sir...great words ....I would be happy if you could review my poem ' yet another day in the life of the universe '

[Deboleena]

Its nice ! Last line is awesome - smiling at life, and making others smile.

Carry on......

[manju menon]

Thank you Deboleena for the kind words..awaiting more reviews