raped

Every single night and moment
I cried in my intense pain
I was papa's precious gem
Fragile as spring flower
Pampered with love of mother
Cuddled by my big brother
Every touch was sacred and cared
Untill the dark night unveiled
My tiny happy world was pulverized
I was on merciless burning fire
They were toying me with vile desire
My blood was replaced by wine
I was pierced by canine
Now lights were gone darkness profound
My scream was supressed
I was crushed into pieces
My soul turned into ashes
I was a trash
Papa's precious gem was smashed.

Author's Note

Ignore grammar problems, please read it and review it

Reviews

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A very deep write.

True or otherwise, your words are searing and full of pain. Life can be cruel once we leave the protective cocoon of the family home. Like a baby bird, we must learn to fly. Keep on flapping. You will overcome and fly as well.

A very painful piece of writing. Nicely expressed and full of emotion. Nice work.

[manisha]

thanks for your review. glad u read it

[samparks,sam]

Nice dear theme is clear no matter gramer I like it

[manisha]

Thanks sam for ur review

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, the innocence and being protected by family can only last so long...then life hits us like a brick in the face...and all is lost...we feel what the speaker feels in this...losing it all..the world shattering into pieces.

j.

[manisha]

Thanks for your kind review

[H.L. Cerveise]

This is a very well written poem about a terrible crime. I can feel the devastation, and like barleygirl said your use of metaphors was great. The last line, "Papa's precious gem was smashed," plunged into my heart like a knife when I read it.

[manisha]

Thanks for taking time to read it and understand it

[barleygirl]

This is a very unique & original way to describe the experience of rape. I like the way you set up the story without hurrying, explaining how the victim was loved & treated well in her family, thus suggesting that she was totally unprepared for the harshness to come. Since I was treated with abuse in my own family, I wasn't a bit surprised to discover the world is full of violent abusers. You use metaphors well (blood/wine and pierced by canine). And your irregular rhymes work well. I hope this isn't autobiographical . . . if it is, I'm very sorry you had to go thru this.

[manisha]

Thanks for taking time and read it and for ur kind review. Feel bad about u sorry

[Shabeeh Haider]

Someone who has grown up in the secure and safe environment of home ends up seeing the cruel and vile world that lurks outside daddy's safe haven.
You have portrayed the contrasts in a very fine manner.
Being treated as a previous gem at home, only to be treated like a toy and discarded

[manisha]

Thanks for ur review and to understand it.

[Diamond]

amazing! turmoil put in words!

[manisha]

Thanks for ur review. I will try next time better

[William Liston]

Wow. You had some very good descriptions in this. Good job.

-William Liston

[manisha]

Thanks William

[Matt Ventimiglia]

Intense and powerful. "My blood was replaced by wine. I was pierced by canine." Wow.

[manisha]

Thanks matt i m glad u liked it.