Hold My Hand

a friend's hand is always welcome

 

Shimmering strands of light

float down from the moon this night.

I'm all alone, out to roam,

hear whispers and a soft moan.

 

The bare branches of the trees

seem like evil threatening me.

The air is bursting with tension,

building up my apprehension.

 

The shrieking howl of a cat

sends shivers up my back.

Breathless feelings of fear,

wondering who is near.

 

As I creep along this path,

wishing for courage i don't have.

Out of the shadow steps a man,

saying, hold my hand, just hold my hand.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Andrew N. Farrens]

"The bare branches of the trees
seem like evil threatening me."

I have always felt that some old trees are malicious in nature, looking to do harm to any innocent person who comes across them. It is even more disconcerting to be in a forest of such trees.....
Great poem! A perfect example of good writing.........
Indeed.

ANF

100/100

[mandy]

andrew, thank you so much...glad you enjoyed it!

[Claire Twinn]

I like the mix of emotions here, creepy yet mystical. I can't decide if the man is friend or foe!

[mandy]

friend, claire...by taking his hand, the fear diminishes. thank you for reading.

[TheLastEclipse]

I couldn't decide that either :O Thank you for the clarification.

[Sami Geiger]

wonderful!

[Mark]

Nicely constructed. I wanted more though... It reads like the beginning of a poetic tale then just abruptly ends just as it's getting started! :)

[mandy]

sorry, markie! there ain't no mo' :-) it was about fear, and how it can stop abruptly with the offer of a friendly hand. thanks for readng.

[Mark]

oh well. heehee

[Damien Davison]

Sounds kinda creepy if you look at it literally haha. But no, it was a good write, well done.

[mandy]

it's the season to be creepy....but it was more than that..lol. thanks, demien

[Damien Davison]

Heheh I know, I got it :P Was just saying.

[mandy]

cool... :-)

[anxia]

How sweet is the last line!!!! I also loved :
'The air is bursting with tension,
building up my apprehension.'
The rhyming is good so is the way you have portrayed it.
This is really well written .Keep it up, Mandy.

[mandy]

thank u so much for the kind words. this is actually the first new writing i have done for a couple of years,,all my other work was done earlier. i just wrote this in the wee hours of the morning. thanks for reading.