A Light in the Darkness

Why cause yourself so much pain

You don't have to live this way

There is hope

Which runs anew

So listen to what I'm telling you

All the destructive behaviors they have to stop

In the end it won't get you to the top

Is it a cry for attention

Or a way to pass time

Dulling pain of the daily grime

Your too young to live this way

What pain could you of been through to not want to live for today

Believe me when I say it will all be okay

Trust in God

He offers a love greater then anyone could

Without the judgment and criticism all the others would

Through his love you can see

grace, peace, beauty

I hope you know your in my prayers every night

You are meant for so much more

Your light is still shining bright

 

 

 

Reviews

[Michael]

A wonderful sentiment and theme. I would look at the natural rhyme that occurs. As it is there is just enough to suggest a scheme and it gets in the way of the flow for a free verse work. Still, overall it is a well balanced work that leaves one feeling hopeful.

I did find a few nits for you:

Im = I'm
judgement = judgment
everynight = every night

[Margaret Barton-Wahl]

WOW! What an intuitive inner dialog piece. I like it. Good work! Margaret Barton-Wahl

[John Stussy]

Glad you can try to make someone shine with a poem like this. I can sort of identify with the person it is addressing though, sometimes it hurts to the extent that inflicting pain on myself can make whatever is hurting me feel less painful. It's usually not meant to be self-destructive, but can come out that way. Good job though, it's a very uplifting poem.

[The Tao of Bri]

beautifully uplifting...the grief and loss process is so different for everyone and this instills the hope and positive power of the future when the present sucks!~ GREAT WWISDOM!

[Thad Presley]

this is a wonderful poem, it starts great with hope and tells about God and then you add that I am in your prayers. It could not have been said better or more beautifully. I will read more of your delightful poetry and comment when I feel compelled. thank you, you have a great gift.