Daughter's Confessions

A poem he will never read

You were my everything

And I dont think you understand

How much it meant to me when you would take my hand

Why sit there and pretend holding lives in the balance

When you left we all fell

Don't you see the revelance?

Damaging sweet lives too young to comprehend

Why daddy won't stay and see it through to the end

Showing a young heart the coldness of this world

A hurt that purled our minds

The selfishness astounding

A sad side to mankind

A first love

A first loss

A fathers love in your heart

I have yet to come across

Reviews

[Legion]

:( and again :(

This is a superbly written and saddenly wonderful piece. You have captured the essence of loss to the extreme and the repercusion it forces upon us in those last four lines that can not be equalled by anything I have read or written. Brilliantly done. Going in favorites. Please continue writing this calibre of work. Kudos.

[Laura E. Aranda]

so so sad
Im sorry you had to write this one...but glad you were able to get it out of your system....one thing to work on: Maybe fixing the title
Daughter's Confession

[J-Rod]

This is both beautiful and heartbreaking. I'd say that makes it a very good piece! Good work. I love it.

[John Stussy]

I'm sorry that your dad left. I wish mine had, it would have made the situation a heck of a lot easier for my family. Very well written poem, I can feel your loss, the early exposition to pain like that.

[Lalli]

what a heavy poem.

sorry to hear.

very well written, but heartwrenching nevertheless.. but we can learn from what is shared and i appreciate you being bold enough to put this up. so thank you.

i hope writing it helped you release.. i hope that it has only made you a stronger person.

much love n respect

-Lalli

[T]

wonderfully written and so very heartfelt ...

[Amber]

Greatly written and heartfelt. Very inspiring.