josh

Ch.3

Josh

 

Everyone thinks im gay. I’m not though I just get excited over pretty things. I’m walking to my groups lunch table when Jake grabs me and tells me too follow him. He’s a pretty nice guy so I follow. He takes me to this beautiful garden in our school. Whoa is he gay? Wow that would be a real shocker. Then he tells me he considers me a friend and he knows im not gay. Boy is that a relief. Then he invites me to the mall after school. I say yes and then he leaves quickly (which is strange if he says were friends.)

AFTER SCHOOL AT THE MALL

Were walking and eating and not really saying much. Jake says he has to go to the bathroom (I thought he was gonna invite me or something) so I wait for him in the outside part of the mall. I see this really hot girl making out with this guy. She turns and I see her face…Alice…the Alice? Alice has a huge crush on me, she even told me because were pretty good friends. I sort of like her but I also like someone else. The guy she was smooching leaves and I get all nervous. I’m about to leave when she says josh. Her beautiful face is inches from mine. I lean in to kiss her but she pulls away…

Reviews

[forevermore1218]

I gotta say that I like where you are going and that your style is very nice. I am not a fan of how quick your story goes and how it is a bit of confusing. I suggest making a prologue for this, only so we understand the scene better.

I do like where you are going with this and the way you bring out your character's different personalities.
-forevermore1218

[Admiral Kirk]

Wow, there's a ton of kissing in this story. And almost kissing. That explains the title. I noticed you started using capital letters! This is a pretty good story. Keep going. If you don't like it now, the more you write, the better you'll get... Great job with this, it's pretty good! :P

[Serenity Faith]

I loved the way you did the characters from one to the next. It's definitely it's own style ^_~

[dana]

riveting a real page turner. Keeps the reader wanting more.