i love you

i feel my body slowly shut down
i hear my mind start to go blank
as i die
all the memories flood in
and my last words
(i love you)
sting

Reviews

[Jordan Easley]

Short but effective. I really liked this poem. You said everything you needed to say in just a few short words. It tells a story without having paragraphs or stanzas or chapters. I think a lot of people could learn from you and cut down on their HUGE works of literature. Nicely done.

[dana]

It is a powerful, wonderful poem....but so so SAD!

[Kerri Hart]

hey gurl! lovin ur writiing

we have tgo plan a time to hang out!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[amanda]

yes for sure what day r u free

[Kerri Hart]

idk

friday... i think... LOL

[roxy]

lol check!

[roxy]

Such a powerful and strong poem, and you are only 12 wow! It was short and direct. I think in a few years you will be an author to look for! What does this poem mean to you personally?

[David Lewis Paget]

Short and sweet, but strange that a twelve year old should be entertaining thoughts of death. Your life is just beginning, be thankful, and write about something joyous.

[Admiral Kirk]

This is really deep and powerful, and tells of the painful yet wonderful thing that everyone on this planet of ours has in common... love.

[Skye]

Another great poem. Short, but saying all that needs to be said very well.