me

   As she walks
People stare
At this girl
They call a freak
   As she walks
People talk
About this girl
With the small figure
   As she walks
People stop
And watch
This girl
Whos name is me

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Alex Davis]

This poem has great structure, essentially this is what i meant by my advice on hospital. i love the flow and roll, the patterns of syntax create a good effect. My only tidbit is to be less wordy when possible. such as the line "with the small figure" it kind of throws off your flow, try "small in her figure"

[nana]

Amanda I have enjoyed all your poems. Please keep writing. Also find the book you started. I love you Nana

[Admiral Kirk]

I feel the exact same way! It's either that I dress funny, I look funny, I act funny, i talk funny, my favorite music sucks, no one knows what I'm talking about when I describe my favorite movies, or people just don't like me in general... Partly because I hang with the misfits, but only because I am one myself... Great poem, I'm always the victim too; people telling me who to be and what to look like... Don't listen to them. Be you. It's worked wonders for me. Even though they're not happy, I am, to some degree... It's a low one, but I can be happy...

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I enjoyed this write, deep & emotional

[roxy]

I really like this poem- you have real potential! Keep it up