The Chalk On My Driveway

haha...I found out that this poem isn't a haiku! cuz I wasn't really sure what a haiku was...I should have researched more before I tried it but I tend to do that! lol

Each time I step outside for my walk,
I notice, every now and then,
A scribling of some sort made of chalk.

 

The scribling was always on my driveway.
I'd walk down the to the bottom
to stare at the letters:

 

"Jesus Loves You".
I have taken a few minutes to
let the powerful words sink in.

 

When there's a thunderstorm,
the rain pelts the sidewalk so that
the letters would slowly fade in front of me.

 

I looked at the smudged words...
wondering who had the heart to write them.
Why did they only write them on my driveway?

 

I rubbed the toe of my shoe against the rough surface,
now that the words are almost gone,
my heart aches for them to come back!

 

But why?
Only one answer has crossed my mind...
The answer I've been waiting for.

 

I know these words are true.
Somehow, I believe them.
I will search for the person who wrote this.

 

And I will ask them for more.
I'm glad I've had this experiece.
This experience that has changed my life.

 

I sit at the dinner table with my new best friend;   

And to think it all started with...
The chalk on my driveway.

Author's Note

I hope you liked it. thanks for your correction Emma and Ben. I now know what a haiku is! I thought it was just a three line poem or something....idk! I should have researched which I already said above but I am known for rambling so cheerio!

Reviews

[Vesa Lee]

Lovely write for sure.
I could literally feel myself standing on the sticky pavement, see my red sneakers (at least that's how they looked in my minds eye *laughs*) scratching the place where the words should still be...aching for the words to come back...
So innocent and simple and yet somehow so deep and powerful.
Really enjoyed it. *smile*

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Oh this I like. Well done.

[deeps]

"Jesus Loves You".
I have taken a few minutes to
let the powerful words sink in.

Love these lines here
So true too
Wonderful write

[Ben]

Hey, Mandi. Sorry to break this to you, but this is not a Haiku poem at all. Emma, you are correct. Here, let me show you the definition, from Dictionary.com: 'a major form of Japanese verse, written in 17 syllables divided into 3 lines of 5, 7, and 5 syllables, and employing highly evocative allusions and comparisons, often on the subject of nature or one of the seasons.' This is not a Haiku poem, but just a normal poem. It was written very well, though I think there were a few parts like: 'I have taken a few minutes to let the powerful words sink in.', and: 'the rain pelts the sidewalk so that the letters would slowly fade in front of me.' I think you are ending both the firsts lines of those two to abruptly, unless you meant to do that. I don't think chalk would be classified as nature, also. Haha. I like the ending part of the poem, 'I sit at the dinner table with my new best friend; And to think it all started with...The chalk on my driveway.' I don't know why, but it makes me feel kinda weird, if you know what I mean... I know, I'm strange. As I said, it was very well written, and I enjoyed it! Good job, Mandi!

[emmajoy]

Hello, Sweet Pea! Oh my, you've been very busy writing and such a long, emotional piece too.

The idea here of the chalked words is wonderful, very poignant and profound .. and the ending is just beautiful. ' ... now that the words are almost gone, my heart aches for them to come back! '

Mandi, I'm not actually positive that this is Haiku style .. i could be very wrong (I often am!) but I think Haiku has three lines of. 5:7:5 syllables and is usually is about the natural world. If I'm wrong I truly apologise and will stand corrected with head hung down.

Your poem is so beautiful that it stands on it own anyway and I'll rate it accordingly.

This writing is incredibly rich with meaning.