Ocean

Ocean

A Poem by Manash Saikia
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from every drop of water and every world map , I was being amazed watching the blue portion :)

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Survival , in the world
where we belong,
speaking to every color cloud,
and camouflage
to the kings of every miracle
the distant deep secrets
living quiet with tides,
and a breathless suicide.

Poseidon , and its infinite inches below,
to every core elements
to every blue black illusions
renewed and renowned
spirits under it,
and the shelter of every being inside
a shout to  the dumb 
Ocean is our home.  

© 2014 Manash Saikia


Author's Note

Manash Saikia
Inspire yourself well :)

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I loved this, it was a great read. Just two suggestions, the line "living quite with tides" i think you meant quiet instead of quite. And the line "a shout to the dumb" maybe replace dumb with ignorant. I hope you don't mind the advice, I usually don't give suggestions unless people ask for them, but your poem was so close to perfect and the alterations so small that i decided to break my rule. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Manash Saikia

10 Years Ago

Thanks man! you helped me out to recognize my mistakes :) thanks alot !
you saved my respect .. read more
Grace Marie

10 Years Ago

I'm so glad I could help you out :D



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I loved this, it was a great read. Just two suggestions, the line "living quite with tides" i think you meant quiet instead of quite. And the line "a shout to the dumb" maybe replace dumb with ignorant. I hope you don't mind the advice, I usually don't give suggestions unless people ask for them, but your poem was so close to perfect and the alterations so small that i decided to break my rule. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Manash Saikia

10 Years Ago

Thanks man! you helped me out to recognize my mistakes :) thanks alot !
you saved my respect .. read more
Grace Marie

10 Years Ago

I'm so glad I could help you out :D
I like this line,
"to the kings of every miracle"

~Yvette

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Manash Saikia

10 Years Ago

hehe. dedicated to you :D

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Added on June 17, 2014
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Manash Saikia
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I am a small writer from a small corner of a city. I am like a wind that blows but don't destroys but passionates you to speak more :) more..

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