One Last Time

Love Of Life

Walked on the water,

along the wind.

The ripples are fewer

yet could be seen.

Sang with the birds

to bask in sunshine.

The melody of the chirps 

couldn't mask voice of mine.

Tried to hide away

from your dangling eyes.

But you heaved away

every single obstacles.

Just to embrace

my cold body.

That's rested in a coffin,

for one last time.

Reviews

[Pravir]

Beautifully lines with a touchy ending . . . keep sharing

[Manasa.L]

I will be Thank you.

[Great Aunt Astri]

You have identified well with your subject matter. Love the poetry and your imagination weaves a wonderful story. Will read more of your poems!

[Manasa.L]

Thank you so much.

[writ rajat]

BAHUT BADHIYA LIKHA HAI APNE

[Manasa.L]

Shukriya aap jaisi logon ki wajeh se hi hum yahan tak aaye hai.

[writ rajat]

RASTE ME CHALTE HUE KOI GUSTAKHI NAA KAR DENA ,
PYAAR KE WARDI KO KHAKHI MAT KAR DENA

[Manasa.L]

Bahut khoob shukriya ji....:)

[Great Aunt Astri]

Oi, I can't understand this!!!! What language are you speaking ... I will have to look it up!

[writ rajat]

My mother tongue hindi indian languages

[Falcon1]

Has meaning does shine did you spill your glass of wine while you were writing somehow.

[Manasa.L]

No it just came out while reading some other writing from a textbook. Thank you.

[AndrewWrites]

Wow.

This is an awesome and very powerful piece, and it made me think. Looking at a piece that involves deeper thinking is always something that makes me smile, and this is one of those pieces.

Awesome work, keep it up :)

[Manasa.L]

Thank you Andrew. Deeper we think good thoughts come out and become art.

[Tina H.W.]

This is such a beautiful, thought-provoking piece. My heart melted with those last four lines.
Wonderful! :)

[Manasa.L]

Oh! I am happy that you stopped by to read thank you.

[Tina H.W.]

My pleasure! :)

[Re-Pete]

yes, this is a great perspective on our lives. powerful meaning and thought provoking. must cling to life no matter how hard or difficult. now i see why it clicks - i used to write software and love music too!

[Manasa.L]

thank you. I love music too and I'm also a software programmer.

[Sonakshi Arora]

You write amazing! Keep it up! Thanks for sharing :)

[Manasa.L]

Thank you S.A...Its nice to hear from you.

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSh..]

What a great Poem about the movement of one's Spirit. I could feel your journey. Beautiful.

Sheer Terror

[Manasa.L]

Thank you....:)

[Jimmy Yetts]

A lovely and powerful portrayal creates a dramatic statement.
Love, life and death do, indeed, embrace.
Much enjoyed "One Last Time!"

[Manasa.L]

Thank you for those words Jimmy hope you enjoyed