I need you

Based on `` a Declaration of Need''

I need you...

like a scone needs jam

like a beaver needs a dam

like Gretna needs Green

like a King needs a Queen

like Bill needs Ben

like a writer needs a pen

like Bognor needs class

like a student needs beer

like a sound needs an ear

like a sweep needs some soot

like a shoe needs a foot

like a model needs weight

like a meadow needs a gate

like Batman needs Robin

like cotton needs a bobbin

like a hand needs a glove

like a heart needs some love

like a person needs a friend

like this poem needs...

... an end.

 

 

 

Author's Note

be gentle! my 1st poem! :)

Reviews

[lil miss Bexy]

This wasn't bad for my 1st poem! especially because ferg helped write it! oo ar!

[Lauren Xena Campbell]

Wonderful poem! Great use of the repetition in 'like a�' and some of these lines are very amusing.

like a student needs beer
like a model needs weight
like a writer needs a pen (or else how do we live!)

although I did disagree with one statement,
'like this poem needs...
... an end.'
I could have carried on reading all day! As I said very enjoyable and entertaining, with great rhymes and keen intellect. Wonderful first write Little Sis. Hoping to read more soon.

[Jack Crueso]

wow this is not only well written in its rhyming style but also very funny. im not good at reviewing but its definately worth a read

[Enigma]

This is really cute, funny and well....everything good.
I couldn't understand what beer has to do with students, and the line doesn't rhyme with any other lines
I love it!! And yeah!, nice profile pic.... =D

[Shadows of Sight]

I liked it! but i don't know why students would need beer, or why beer would need students?
nice connections, and it read smooth and quick!
Good job, keep up the creative juices! The are always best freshly squeezed! lol :)

[Kimmee Jean]

its so cute!

[Eagle Cruagh]

I need you...

like a scone needs jam

like a beaver needs a dam

like Gretna needs Green

like a King needs a Queen"

I was thoroughly sold on this poem at this point, "like a beaver
needs a dam". I love it !
Not only is this a clever little poem, but it is pretty and
sweet, it is uplifting and just what many of us need at the
end of a long hard day.
Thank You !

---- Eagle Cruagh

[THERISA]

Welcome to the Cafe, Bexy. Your poem is creatively funny and flows smoothy in delivering its humourous message. Just the perfect thing to read on a depressing winter's day. Thank you for sharing this very funny poem with us.

Therisa

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Hehe, this was such a fun and creative piece. Very funny, too lol. My favorite lines were, "like a student needs beer/ like a model needs weight/ and, like a heart needs some love." Well Done!

Mikey