Strength.

motivation to make a change.

Avoided all mirrors and obsessed with the scale,

"thinner!" she cried and skipped another meal. 

Weaker she got and her face faded pale,

She just couldn't give up until her mind made the sale.

Her body was brittle, weak and abused,

she fell to the floor, pitch black, couldn't move.

Rushed into care, her family by her side, 

she witnessed them cry, preparing for goodbye. 

She then understood she needed to change,

No more obsession, no more self inflicted pain.

She faced every mirror and threw away all the scales,

"I was fine!" she cried, "But completely insane." 

Reviews

[Laura Harrison]

An inspiring poem that depicts inner-strength. I feel like this could help many people suffering from anorexia

[Goldfrog]

An excellently crafted poem. You have exceptional editing control. A natural feel for word connotations, sounds, artful combinations. Adept magic.

Unfortunately, I also feel that you understand your subject too well and, if that's the case, I welcome the courageous triumph of your final two lines. Whomever the subject of your poem is, she has come to catharsis, a sea-change, a game-changer.

Definitely a favorite poem.

[Astro]

Great story, excellent rhyme scheme all the way until the last line where, if I may suggest, "She began her new journey, her old life rearranged." For two reasons, the 'strength' of the piece is made more solid by keeping the rhyme, and "faced away" is unorthodox whereby, the 'facing of ones fears' denotes the doing away with them so, there is no reason to add the word "away". Overall, whether you use my suggestion or not, this is a very good write. Keep it up. Be the change.

[A.J.]

great poem! you may want to re-read lines 1 and 4.. unless you meant them that way. which is just dandy but doesnt follow the voicing of the rest of your poem..

[Sam Mallia]

thankyou ! i see what you mean, i'll definitely work on that !

[A.J.]

i hoped I was on the right track and not just misunderstanding.. lol!

[Sam Mallia]

Lol ! No you're good, thankyou !

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem told a true story for many. Many seek perfection and become sick. I did like the ending. The media create unreachable goals for the kids to reach. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Sam Mallia]

Thankyou that means a lot.

[Sam]

Love the ending the inner strength she shows an awesome contrast to the beginning seeing her addiction to her weight but to see this new side break through was awesome. Amazing use of words here. Thank you so much for sharing.

[Sam Mallia]

Thank you so much :)

[Sam]

Your welcome!