The Surprise At The Amusement Park

One of my many stories. My first on this website. this story is not done. I would like some advice for it. Any suggestions ??

It’s the middle of June here in California, where the weather is always nice, unlike the people who live here. The big shot people who always think they’re better at everything just because they’re richer than you. It’s a beautiful and hot, humid day. My foster family of many lives here in California, near the beach and away from the snobby rich people. My foster parents are really rich but they make sure not to show it. But right now I’m playing with and watching their kids. Caleb and Preston are 3 year old twins, Braydon  is 2, and Konnor is 5 months. It’s quite a handful if you ask me.

The adults are trying to get themselves ready to be able to take us to the Disneyland park for the week. My foster family manages their money well, inside of buying something to just buy it. They make sure their money doesn’t go to waste.. I play with the kids while trying to hold Konnor, keeping him safe from the chaos on ground level..

“Alright, who’s getting changed first?” Amy asked. Amy is my foster mom, she’s really nice, if the boys’ aren’t getting to her. She picks up Braydon and takes him into a room to get him ready.

Joe comes over and takes Preston, he squirms in his arms as he takes him into another room. Joe is my foster father. Would not advise getting him angry. He has quite the temper and has no patience. He’s nice to me because I cause him no trouble. I help them out actually all the time. I sigh with tiredness, left with Caleb and baby Konnor. Sarah, the mother of Konnor, Amy’s sister, comes and takes him gently from my arms to get his diaper changed and into new clothes. I take Caleb to the last room available and start to change him. 10 minutes later, I get him set up, letting him go play with his brothers. I enter my own room to get myself changed into a slimming hot pink tank top, jean booty shorts, and my new black kicks I got for my birthday. I pack up my sexy turquoise and hot pink bikini, my coverup, and also things to keep me occupied into my purse, grabbing my luggage bag as well. I exit my room and into the living space. Their house is easy to get lost in. Five stories, 5 full bathrooms, two master bedrooms, 10 guest bedrooms, 3 living rooms, 71 maids and servants. Getting everyone ready can be hard to do if there’s so much room to get around. In August I’ll be becoming a Junior in this preppy private school for boys and girls. I pick Braydon up, all of us ready to load into the white Limo. The butler puts all the bags inside the large trunk, all of us having multiple bags, except the kids, them only having one each.  

We leave the big, modernized, off-white mansion, getting all of us into the Limo. It was hard for the adults to get in, their size getting in the way a little. But they all manage to get in fine, except the kids are getting a little impatient, which seems to get the adults pretty pissed off. And there isn’t any seat buckles, so we have to hold them down all the way there. But it wasn’t long before we arrived to Disneyland. I get out first, getting the kids out first so the adults can sorta take their time getting out.

We play in the empty parking lot, since they’re rich over hills, we get to go in whenever we want. It seems nice, but after awhile you feel bad for people who can’t do what we can. Once they are all out, we head to the main gate. Of course the boys are running ahead, meaning I have to go with them. It’s not that hard to catch up with them, so it wasn’t too bad of a task. As we get to the gate, I pull a special badge from my handbag and they let us in before the adults are near. I round up the boys.

“Now listen up boys,” they turn their attention to me. “We have about one hour before people start showing up, And it’s 9:00 now. We can go on any ride you want. Just as long as you’re tall enough,” they nod their heads and run off and I follow them, knowing what ride they are going to first. It’s this giant dragon like beast that goes up and down and in a circle, it also spins.. It’s good all four of us can fit because they each need to have an adult with them. I get a Snapchat notification, someone that I don’t recognize. The username looks familiar but I can’t put a finger on it. They are in California, and they say they are on their way to Disneyland, weird. I can’t see their face either, the picture being a road sign from a highway.  

I shrug it off and help the boys into the dragon. I take a picture on Snapchat, putting a caption saying “Got first dibs on all the rides! Love my fam!” I smile at the good picture and save it. I quickly add it to my story and put my phone away as the ride starts. They laugh and giggle for 4 minutes, then wanting to get off. I help them out and they run to a little carnival game and stare at three different bears. The guy was about to give the three bears up for them. “Wait, stop. These awesome bears deserve to be won fair and square.” I give him $9 and he gives me 9 darts. Each three balloons I hit, I get a stuffed animal. I throw dart after dart, not missing a single balloon I aim for. The guy looked at me like I’m some crazy wizard.

“My real father taught me accuracy before he died. I basically never miss,” I smile and give the boys their animals. I look at my phone, seeing it’s 9:30 already. “Okay we have one more ride we can do before people start showing up,” they start running towards the Log Ride, their second favorite after the dragon one. I figure the adults are sitting down eating food somewhere. I text them where we are going and to tell me where they are so we can meet up. I run off after the boys, catching up to them fast. We climb the stairs up to the Log Ride and I put my purse into one of the cubbies.

The man operating the ride nods his head a little at me, in a way to say hello. I smile ask who wants to be first, which was Preston. Then it’s Caleb with Braydon right in front of me. I get them all situated and give him the thumbs up. He cranks the lever and we start moving down the little man-made river. The boys were enjoying it, while I think it was slow and boring. But, I will have my moment alone, going onto the biggest roller coasters in the world. I daze off, thinking about the awesome coasters that await me. What felt like seconds later, the ride was done and the intercom goes off, saying that the park is now open to the public. “Alright boys, time to go find the rest of the family.” We get out and I grab my purse from the cubby. We walk through the exit and I get my phone from the pocket, reading the text message.

“At the waterpark of the amusement park, meet us here when you’re done. Then we can get the boys changed into their bathing suits.”

I look over at the boys, seeing them playing tag around a bench. “Alright boys, let’s go get changed up and do some swimming for a little. Let’s all hold hands so no one gets lost, okay?” We make our way to the water park, holding hands while some people walk past. We see the sign where it switches to a waterpark. We see the adults already and walk to them, the boys getting into the water.

“Get out! You’re in your clothes!” Amy yells and gets up, pulling them out of the water. Joe and Amy take them to the changing rooms. I take my bikini out of my handbag and walk to the changing room, changing into it. I put on my cover-up before I put my clothes into a locker. I walk out and wait for the boys to come out changed. I look at Sara and see Konnor in his tiny little bathing suit.

“He’s so cute in it!” I say, looking at him smile as I make funny faces.

“He sure is. Can you take him into the water for a little?” She asks politely. I smile and take Konnor, walking into the water with him. I one handedly take off the cheetah print cover-up and put it onto the green and white striped lawn chair.

“Life for you must be easy. People taking care of you, not having a worry in the world” I bounce him a little in my arms. I sit in the water of the kid-sectioned waterpark area. He laughs and giggles as he plays with the water, getting both of us wet. I laugh with him and make sure to hang on to him as I lift him up and into the water. I hear people and look at my watch, it reads 10:20. I hear yelling and screaming.

“Looks like they are back from changing.” I make baby noises and funny faces, making him smile and giggle. I feel splashes from behind and some hit Konnor. He starts crying and I stand up with him. “Hey, we know not to splash when Konnor is around,” I say frustrated. I walk him out and give him back to Sarah, so he can calm down and dry off.

Caleb runs up to me, pulling on my arm,“Can you take us to the play structure in the water?” He asks so cutely, I giggle.

“Yeah, I will.” I take his hand and the other two follow us to the structure. They play around it for a little bit before wanting to go up the stairs, where three different slides were. All three of them climb the stairs, well, Braydon needed some assistance. Caleb and Preston stand waiting at the top, near the slides, no one but workers are up here to make sure no one gets hurt.. “Okay, Caleb and Preston, you get your own slide, I’ll go with Brayden,”

I rub the top of his head a little. We get in the slides, waiting to be told to go down. The guy gives us a thumbs up and we slide down the slides. I can hear all of them laughing, enjoying it. We get to the end and they want to go again, though a little line has formed. “Why don’t we go try the Lazy River?” I ask and see their eyes light up, starting to get excited over it. I laugh as they jump around me. Then they run off into the direction of the Lazy River.

“Guys be careful! It’s slippery!” I say, before slipping on water that dripped off of them. I scream, closing my eyes, and fall backwards. I brace myself for the hard fall that never came. I open my eyes and feel strong arms around my body. I get back straight on my feet and turn around, seeing a familiar face.

“Thanks, you uh, saved me from falling,” I smile shyly.

“No problem,” He says in his deep masculine voice, looking behind him, I see his 2 white friends and 3 black friends slowly make their way towards him.  

“S**t..” I say, now knowing who it is. “I have to go, I’m watching my little brothers,” I turn around quickly, but carefully, walk to the Lazy River. But before I was out of earshot, I heard his friends call me sexy and a babe. I roll my eyes and keep going. I see them all sitting on the bench, waiting for me. “I’m so proud at you guys! After this, We can get you guys some lunch. You get to pick it out.”

I kiss each of their foreheads and get a raft big enough for all of us. We float along the river and halfway they all start complaining about being hungry. I sigh and smile, getting us all off and on the side of the Lazy River. I give the raft to someone else, getting out of the water and walk them to a delicious food cart they will enjoy. They each pick something out but the person at the cart won’t take my money because I’m like family. I groan and wait for the food, watching the boys sit and play around the picnic table.

They hand the food to me on a tray and I walk it over. I look a little beyond the table and see the guy who saved me from falling. I look over at him for a little until he looks over towards me. I glance down, hoping he doesn’t notice me. I sit down and get the food separated. I look to where he was and see he isn’t there anymore. “How’s the food boys?” I ask, seeing them eat it, but see them stop suddenly. “What are you looking at??” I look behind me and see him ordering food with his friends. I look back at them, “Eat it before it gets cold boys.”

They nod and continue to eat. I text Amy saying, “We are eating at the food cart” I put my phone away and start eating. I groan a little as their laughter grows louder. “Hey, you three go sit at the table behind you. Stay close to me and in my sights.” They run off to the table with their food and the group of boys plop down at the table, the one catching me sitting right next to me.

He nudges me, “Have you fallen again since I got caught you?” They all chuckle a little.

“No, I didn’t. Thanks for asking though.” I say in a low voice, starting to get up and go to the boys.

He tugs on my arm, “Hey, I’m kidding.” He looks at me for a couple of seconds, “You look familiar.” They all nod their heads in agreement.

“Well, you don’t. Guess I just have one of those faces.” I start to get up again, him pulling me down once more.

“No, really. It’s like I’ve seen you before.” He thinks a little and his mouth drops,“You’re Kaya…” He stares at me.

“Uh, no I’m not.” I lie to his face, knowing who this was now.

“You must remember me Kaya. We Online dated for the longest time!” He says, getting excited.

“Yeah, then you cheated on me with another girl who was further away than I was. Guess I should have seen that coming.” I say, the words barely coming out clear, tears forming in my eyes. I get up quickly, not finishing my food, and tell the boys to throw their trash away and to follow me. They do as I say, I hear them running to catch up to my fast walking. I hear another set of footsteps, faster than the boys. I wipe tears off my face even though they will keep coming. I walk faster, the boys catching up. I see Amy and I walk up to her, telling her I need my own space.

She smiles, brushing hair out of my face “Make sure to get your phone on. I’ll give you some time. Text me when you come back though. We need help with the kids.” I nod and head into the changing room. I change into my normal clothes and put my bathing suit on the shelves to dry. I leave and walk out of the water park. .

“Kaya!” I hear a guy call after me, tears still coming down my face. I pretend to not hear him. “I know you can hear me,” I curse under my breath as I hear him catching up. “Wait up Kaya!” He grabs my arm, turning me around. I see his friends slowly closing the gap as they walk over.

“What the hell do you want??” I say with tears in my eyes.

“What just happened?” He asks confused.

“You just happened. You raised me up and made me feel special. Then you dropped me and picked up a new toy. Who does that?!” I yell at him, quiet enough not to make a scene.

“I wasn’t thinking, I made a mistake. Can you forgive me?” He smiles at me.

“Go f**k yourself...” I mumble out with anger, turning and walking away.

He pulls my arm, “Kaya, why are you being like this? It was like 3 years ago,” He doesn’t turn me around.

“Yeah, 3 years too late to forgive,” I rip out of his grip and keep walking.

He runs and stops me from up ahead, “C’mon Kaya, I’’m sorry. I was young then. Young and stupid enough to leave a gem like you behind. I didn’t know how good I had it before I left you.”

“Don’t call me Kaya. You lost the right to say that.” I move to the right but he moves with me.

He walks up to me and puts his hand on the back of my neck, bringing me into a kiss. I’m surprised but I give him a kiss him back. I hear him take a deep breath of my aroma as he kisses me hard on the lips. I try to pull away but he’s got a tight grip of me. I give up and lose myself within the kiss. His free hand holds me close to him, his other on my neck. I sigh happily as his tongue presses against my lips, wanting an invite. I let his tongue in and he starts to slowly explore my mouth.

“Get a room you two,” Zaire says as he walks up to us with the rest of the guys. He kisses me for a couple more seconds before he pulls away.

“Sorry, I got carried away,” he chuckles as he sees my eyes still closed, “Wanting more?” he says teasingly. Before I open my eyes, he lifts up my legs and wraps them around him. I open my eyes and laugh, as he starts to carry me.

“Where we going?” I ask with a smile on my face.

“It’s a surprise,” he gives off a small chuckle and continues to carry me.

“I can walk you know,” I say, my legs starting to unwrap from his waist.

He holds my legs from slipping away, “I know but you must be tired from running around everywhere with those kids.” he pushes me back up and continues to carry me. Eventually he stops, like he’s in a line.

“Where are we?” I ask curiously, trying to look behind me.

He keeps my head facing away, “It’s a ride. But it’s a surprise,” he chuckles happily. I start having a conversation with his friends as Jacob holds me around him.

“Zaire, make sure she doesn’t look.” he says, tilting his head slightly to the side.

“You got it.” He walks up to me, taking off his shirt. He grins and ties it around my eyes so I’m blindfolded. I groan, his shirt kinda sticky from sweat. They all chuckle and we keep moving forward in some sort of line. Jacob suddenly drops me to the ground, taking my blindfold off.

“I thought I’d treat you to a nice roller coaster,” I look up as he talks, my eyes trailing the huge, tall roller coaster track.

“That thing is so tall..” My jaw drops at the size of it. He nudges me up the stairs and helps me onto the main platform. I groan as he puts us in the very front of the roller coaster. He helps me board the empty seat.  He sits next to me and we both look back at the guys getting into their seats in the carts behind us. As the intercom comes on, I get a little nervous.

“Please remain in your seat with your arms up as the workers close the restraints above your head. Make sure to keep your arms and legs within the train cart throughout the ride. If you’re faint of heart, make sure to tell a worker.” Two workers alternate the carts to make it go by faster. I smile shyly at the worker as he closes the restraints and slams it down. He pulls hard to make sure it’s locked because it’s loose on me.

“It’s loose but you’ll be okay,” he smiles at me.

I give off a nervous laugh,” I’m faint of heart Jacob.”

He takes my hand and holds it,”You’ll be okay. Deep breaths Kaya.” I gasp as the roller coaster jerks forward unexpectedly. Squeeze his hand hard as the coaster slowly climbs up the steep tracks. My stomach freaks out as the roller coaster stops at the top.

I quickly scream at the sound the brakes make. I stare down, seeing how high we are. I feel the roller coaster slowly move forward until the weight makes the coaster fall and ride the tracks. Everyone screams and yells as the coaster brings us up and into a loop de loop. But soon, instead of screaming, I start to laugh and yell out with excitement and we go through another big loop. We climb up a steep track and we all go silent with anticipation. I hold unto Jacob’s hand, squeezing it gently as we near the steep fall. He raises our hands as we fall straight down, hearing terrified screams behind us.

I feel the wind blow through my hair and my eyes slightly watering. After a corkscrew, the roller coaster comes to an abrupt stop. We slowly move forward as another coaster slides up. I take a deep breath in as it stops at the loading dock. The restraints come up and everyone gets up, walking over to the exit. Jacob catches my arm and we walk together, big, wide smiles on our faces. He wraps his arm around my waist as we meet up with everyone else.

“So, now what?” says Zaire says, getting bored easily.

“Well, it’s getting a little too hot. How about we hit the water park for a little?” Jacob replies, looking at me and smiles.

“Doesn’t sound like a bad idea,” I smile back at him. He takes my hand as we walk back to the changing rooms. The guys head into the changing room, except Jacob. He kisses my forehead and let's me go.

“See you soon,” he smirks at me. I smile and roll my eyes and walk into the woman’s changing room. I open my locker once again, glad my bathing suit is dry. I enter a changing room and once again change into my bathing suit. I quickly check myself in the mirror and grab my coverup before leaving the changing area. I exit once again and see the boys aren’t done. I walk to a bench nearby and sit, waiting patiently. The first to come out is Jacob, wearing  black and red swim trunks. He sits down next to me, pulling me onto his lap.

“I’m so sorry. I didn’t know it would hurt you that bad. I want anyone but you, but I had to learn it the hard way.” he caresses my cheek and kisses it. I don’t comment but I snuggle into his chest. His hands slowly explore my curvy body, making me get goose bumps. “God, you’re skin is so smooth.” He pecks multiple times on my neck and I let out giggles.

“Are we going to go swimming or what?” Ziaire says playfully.

“Yes, but before we go, I don’t know if Makayla remembers all of you,” Jacob says, us still sitting.

“I remember Ziaire and Patrick. I sorta remember Adam?” I trail off and point to the boys I know.

“The two others are people you haven’t met before, that’s why. That’s DJ and the other is Daniel.”

“Ohh, no I remember Daniel.” I say, recognizing him now. We give each other shy smiles and a little wave. Jacob pulls me closer to him, picking me up.

“Who’s ready for swimming?”

Author's Note

One of my many stories. My first on this website. this story is not done. I would like some advice for it. Any tips or tricks? Different words I could replace or say differently. Or maybe some ideas on how to continue it.