moon kept it's promise

all the people think that all love stories must end happily,actually their wrong . . . this is a real love story that i saw with my own eyes and it ends tragically indeed beautifully . enjoy

moon kept it promise 

"      you told me when we went apart . . . when they were taking you away from me . when you where moving with them to face the destiny without me . you told me don't lose hope , don't lose faith .

       as you were looking at me from the car window , waving with your soft hands with tears running over your cheeks. as they were pulling you in the car i heard you screaming " don't worry . look at the moon every night , he will never make you feel lonely trust it . i will be looking at it too waiting for you to save me . don't forget me " 

         i wanted to run after the car and reach your hands for the last time . i wanted to run and tell you " stupid girl how can i forget you " i wanted to say " i love you , i will find you " 

i promised myself that i will protect you . so how couldn't i save you , how couldn't i save you. i wanted to follow you but my legs failed me . how pathetic i was.

         i was your stepbrother , my father hated me so do your mother , they didn't stand me and sometimes they would hit me because of you . still i didn't hate you indeed i loved you . so did you too 

         i lived alone from house to house i was only 16 so were you . every night i would look to the moon and hope that you are doing the same , how lonely it was even if it was surrounded by all these stars , just like us . how beautiful it was.

         5 years later , i am 21 now , i forgot your name i forgot my parents but i have never forgot to look to the moon every night . i gaze at that beauty with an empty look ,searching for someone,looking for a lost feeling then i see your face , i see your smile  and i remember , my heart start to hurt and my old wounds bleeds again and cold tears falls on my cheek 

         so i searched for you until i found you . i hoped that you still remember me . that you are still waiting for me like i did . but it turns that you betrayed me you are now married and have a cute little boy . i think i should be happy for you , i don't know why but i am not .

         the only reason that kept me alive until now was loving you . but now after i lost your love , i have no reason to be here . in the end i hope you feel what i feel dear .

          and now this will be my last goodbye for real " 

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          marry read the letter with tears in her eyes as her beloved's spirit starts her journey in the other world and as they put his empty shell in it tomb and cover it underground forever you will only hear marry's screaming and crying " stupid boy, how could i forget you . how could you leave me you are not allowed to die ", the poor marry never stopped crying and repeating the same words . 

         2 months later , marry died under the moon's silver light repeating " how could you leave me , wait i'm coming" 

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          if you think that you should be sad , you're wrong . you should be happy because the moon did keep its promise and didn't let them feel lonely . it joined these two lovers again . if it's not in the real world it would be in the other world beyond stars under the moon's eyes .

          let's hope they are happy and let's not feel sad for them 

Reviews

[Chris Orza]

I enjoyed reading your story. It's very heartfelt. I particularly like the idea of the moon keeping its promise and doing the job that the characters couldn't do for each other. You should edit for capitalization and punctuation, and turn passive voice into active. And, keep up the good work.

[maissa]

thanks . . . i will try hard to fix what is wrong . . . the story is real by the way :)