Nothing into Something

 

The first day I saw you I thought nothing of you

I never saw you in the crowd

But then you said "Hello"

I never realized that my whole life would change

That moment...

That second...

My life was different

As time went on the more you changed

From nothing to...Something

Now we had something

We joked around

Laughed and smiled

But then something changed

You became mad

you hurt me

I had feelings for you

I tried to make things better

Put a bandage over it, let it heel

It only left a scab, waiting to fall off, and left a scar

Now your nothing but a memory to me

I still love you but things will never be the same

The first day i saw you I thought nothing of you

Now your something with no meaning....

 

Reviews

[Wórdsmíth]

well, i've now no words to say somethin' for everythin', this's again an amazin' write n showed everythin' it' ain't nothin', your words are everythin'
well, nice ink

[Lina Grey]

A beautiful poem with a beautiful meaning! You have much talent. Thank you.

[alexlessah]

This is a very good poem! I can relate to this a lot.

[ShameemAkhtar]

Good debut, but definitely room for improvement and in time I am sure you will review this and make it more powerful...

Few suggestions if you allow:
'My life was different' Use a more powerful verb to show how your life changed instantaneously.

Also in your poem you paint the evolution of a relationship from nothing to a peak and back to nothing. Break the poem down at each change..

[Alexis]

Heeeeeyyyy!
You said this is one of your first "decent poems". I think it's more than decent! If you just started writing more like you said, then this is awesome! Regardless it is. You did such a good job! I'm so proud of you. XD *applause*

[WritersSoul]

Hey, this is really really good! I love that bit
"But a bandage over it, let it heel
It only left a scab, waiting to fall off."
It'd really nice if you mentioned it to be a scar, that would've been cool.
Anyway, this is a really great poem.
Enjoyed the poem keep writing! :)