FOREVER

its my first creation the poem speaks about the journey of a lover who meets his love somewhere and the latter part describes the aftermath of their "walk together"..

The day i had your glimpse on the wall

The way you trodden down in my breath

It was when my heart did a crawl

You blossomed in my heart out of all the wrath

Lost in your beauty out of this world

Your shadow passed touching me

I was lost in the eyes so bold

A heart so fast stabbing me

Your enchanting smile 

made me whirl for a while

All i could do was to look at you

Standing there with you i walked a mile..

I didn't know the destiny

I had no story

Without symphony

My heart sang for you with a glory

Now when we have walked together

Our shadows have merged

An inch separation will now bother

I wanted your love i urged

Because those who have walked till the end are few

On the roads that make u shiver

I will be holding your hand

FOREVER.......

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Maheep Singh Rathore]

Thank you Katie :)

[chaotic katie]

Lovely flow and imagery, also love the rhyme scheme. Nicely penned!

[Maheep Singh Rathore]

thanks a lot raven :)

[Entropy of the mind]

Well written, nice ryhme scheme.
I liked the vocabulary used here.
A sweet poem about love is nice every once and a while, especially if it is well-worded like this.
Good job.

[Maheep Singh Rathore]

I am really grateful to u Johanna.
Thank you for your appreciation.

[Johanna]

Oh I really liked this poem! :) It was really cute and kind of diffrent, could kind of picture them walking.. depth in this poem, nice rhythm too! :) Good job on this!