Voices of the damned

    Voices of the eternally damned, whispering forgotten names and calling forth souls 

       that heed their calls willing , forgetting earthly bonds and soaring carefree amidst

     broken chains of mortality. Escaping dudgeons of humanity and wardens of trust,

    giving into hidden darkness, growing wiser with the passage of time , gaining power

     throught the infliction of pain, finally granting the ultimate sacrifice of blood, symbolizing

                     life forces .

 

Reviews

[Joseph - Michael]

This is really great way to expressing the vampire lurking for more of the lusting like that. It need a little but of the adjustments, but still, nice prosing

On the other hand, it's all still good here...

[The Viking]

Nice. Love the words and the overload of darkness. Keep up with pieces like this and keep looking at ways of honing your craft and you'll go far.

[Amanda]

an interesting poem...love the vampire concept.

lacks a little structure, but good nevertheless....hope with a little practice, you will become a very good writer. look forward to seeing some of your future works. hang in there and welcome to Writerscafe!

Always,

Amanda = )))

[Vincent Asmodeus]

It reminds me of those 'Ye Olde' Fantasy games... And Oblivion.
Good work, keep it up.
-VA