Mystery Seance

Its not scary. Well barley maybe a bit wierd. I dont know what genre this belongs to so im just putting it in horror.

            Im sitting on the cold stone floor. My heart skips a beat and im scared. Aany is right across from me. We are in a graveyard much like the ones in my dreams. The dreams that i find appealing. The ones where i wake up screaming, fighting for breath. I know its horrible. I know why im doing this. I know it wont work. But the loss of one so great as my father has stricken me with grief. I know that if i die today ill be with my father. My mom will be lonley. But only for the world. Inside she will laugh a big horrendous laugh. I chuckle. But what about the other people. I push that side away. Today is my day. My day to get my father back. I dont want Aany there. But she wont go. Im keeping her at my side when i know its dangerous out here. This makes me shake. What am i now? A horror story. A girl whos so scared and...crazy. Yes I am crazy. I have gone mad. My head starts hurting and now im aware of Aanys hand on my shoulder. I tell her to go. But it comes out as a scream. I really have gotten crazy. The world starts spinning...my heart beats faster and faster. And everything becomes still. Absoultley still.

Reviews

[Bare trees]

I would agree that the person commited suicide or worse yet, was taken by a bad spirit. Wouldn't THAT be scary if it was the fathers spirit and he turned out to be a bad one, but maybe I miss-read it. Liked it though.

[Richard Longbow]

This could be called horror. If I'm not mistaken, this sounds like the main character is committing suicide. I found that part kind of surprising, as well as the lack of empathy the character has for his or her mother. I guess if she's going to laugh a "big horrendous laugh" on the inside, it's not a big deal though. You did a good job on this poem.