When I am an old lady

Inspired by a poet I know who has promised all this and more. lol

WHEN I AM AN OLD LADY

When I'm an old lady, I'll live with my kids.
And I’ll give so much happiness, just as they did.
I want to pay back all the joy they've provided.
Returning each exploit! Oh, they'll be so excited!

I'll drink from the carton and never shut the front door.
I’ll leave toys on the stairs and puddles on the floor.

 I'll write on the walls with crayons and pens
and I'll bounce on the bed till the frame starts to bend.

I’ll open the post and draw on their bills.

I won’t be told “NO” and I’ll never sit still.

I will refuse my dinner when they call me to eat.

I’ll not eat my greens or my salad or meat.

I’ll scuff up my shoes and spill drinks on the table.
But when they get angry. I'll run. If I'm able!
I'll take off my shoes and throw one away.
Then play in the mud till the end of the day.

And later in bed, I'll lay back and sleep well.
Until I wake up with a scream and a yell.
And my kids with a sigh will quietly say

“Parents were better behaved in my day.”

 

Reviews

[barleygirl]

What a brilliant piece of fun! At age 61 I've never had kids, so I haven't seen this side of life much. You detail it out like a glistening hotrod, so that I can picture it, even if I didn't experience it. Perfect details, rhyme, & rhythm, all crafted for maximum playfulness (((HUGS))) fondly, Margie

[magenta24uk]

Thanks glad you enjoyed it, x

[Bob Goddard]

A fun way to get your own back!

[emipoemi]

You've wonderfully composed a brilliant piece of absurdity and humour with this poem. I laughed the whole way through. Every aspect of its poetic existence is brought out with great flair and care that I honestly can say no more than utter praise. Well done!

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Ha ha scintillating, and the punchline wordplay twist super. Indeed we revert to childhood in old age, I have an unposted poem stating all that so I enjoyed your fantastic version. Kudos.

I'm quite a newbie here, luv meeting poetic interactives, so Pleez do review/comment my latest poem too, on suicide, I like to know poets thoughts.

[magenta24uk]

thank you very much. I will take a look at your work.

[Barbara Walker]

I laughed out loud when I read this poem! I don't think that there is a parent in the world who wouldn't like to do this! The syntax, flow, rhythm and rhymes are tops. Kudos to you.

[magenta24uk]

Thank you. I have never been much of a comedy writer but this one just seemed to work. xx

[Teeya]

This is absolutely ADORABLE!!! It paints a portrait my life perfectly at the current stage having four kids, 3 of them age 6 and under, perform nearly every single action mentioned in this piece! Although it'll be awhile before I can "pay them back" for the joy they're currently providing me with, your words truly have me looking forward to it!!!

[magenta24uk]

Thank you that is lovely. I am glad I made you smile. :)

[Tom]

Superb satire, pay back time !!

Nicely penned!

[magenta24uk]

Thank you I am glad you enjoyed it. :)

[Tom]

Great write M !

[Ashley Griffiths]

This is a fantastic piece that sums up the cyclical nature of life and how the family roles/perceptions are changed during different stages of life.

[magenta24uk]

Thank you for reading I hope you enjoyed it.

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Hi magenta24Uk
Thank you for this entry in my little contest.
I'm sure you'll understand that I cannot comment now as this would be unfair to other entries.
I shall return after the contest ends.
Very best regards.
Clive.

[magenta24uk]

Thank you and you're welcome. I do hope it made you smile. :)

[lissalovesyou]

Ah, the last stanza. Lovely. Write on!
lissalovesyou:)

[magenta24uk]

Thank you for your review. x