Take my hand

This image came to me and I had to try to catch it.

Take my hand

 

Take my hand when you’re in darkness

It is there to guide

Soft and warm, caressing

Step out from where you hide

Don’t be afraid, Don’t leave me

Take my hand and hold it tight

Keep trying, please don’t give up

I’m here dancing in the light

If you let the shadows win

And take away your soul

You will only leave behind

A pain, a scar, a hole

Look at me, I’m shining

My hand is stretched your way

Take it, oh please take it

Don’t steal my heart away.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This is a brilliantly inspiring piece! Many writers try to be uplifting when facing such a dire situation as someone feeling suicidal, but it often comes across as an annoying pep talk. I volunteered on the suicide hotline for a few years & mostly people just want you to meet them where they are without trying to fix them. In your lovely poem, you are offering the wounded person your honest heart of hearts, which is pure & simple & it comes with no expectations. Just come let me comfort you for a bit. That's what the deeply broken people need in a friend. This is the best message you could offer such a person! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[magenta24uk]

Thank you. I am deeply moved by your review. I can tell you have a warm heart and you made me smile today. Thank you very much, sometimes a kind word is more than enough.

[Adam Adams]

Overwhelming and heartfelt - much more valuable and uplifting. Good deal!

[emipoemi]

I like the flow, I like the imagery, the narrative is brilliantly profound. But what I can't quite grasp is how the last line fits into everything. There doesn't seem to be any antecedent of "stealing away a heart" when in darkness, so I would advise some tweaking there. And it's just the last line. Everything else is absolutely brilliant! Well done overall!

[magenta24uk]

The heart is the person. If they die or go, they are lost and have been stolen. It is a way of saying do not take away the part of me that is connected to you. If I lose you I lose my heart.

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Aw such a heartwarming consoling comforting poem in beautiful compassionate wordings, awesomely rhymed too. And it can be read both ways, as a human extending loving hands or On God's behalf superbly.for God does say and mean such things but we can be mediums too to extend a hand to help like God wants. Kudos and take care.

[magenta24uk]

I have a poem called Hand of light which is similar but was published in a Christian journal. It is more about a higher power offering help. Thank you for your review. :)

[David E Navarro]

I found this poem to be very well done, it has some ambiguity that injects intrigue, it is engaging and positive, but not unrealistically so, it speaks to the reader emotionally, it is very nicely done.

In fact, this poem was so good, that it was entered into the NavWorks Press, Pride in Poetry Prize that I ran here and this poem was selected for publication in our volume, Sometimes Anyway. You can find it anywhere books are sold. See my Writer's Café blog for more details: http://www.writerscafe.org/navworks/blogs/Release-of-Two-New-Books/126161/

[Angel Criner]

This is how I feel when someone I care for is pushing me away and all I want is for them to be okay...
I know that if they lose themselves I'll lose them too...
I want nothing more for them to let me help them if I can and to hope that they'll stay.
Because if you allow them too they'll either get lost or run away.
Loved the write... loved it.

[magenta24uk]

thank you x

[Lydia Shutter]

It is important to accept help when it is offered with a full heart. Many people do not allow others to care about them and that is a big mistake in life. A beautiful image presented here. Lydi**

[magenta24uk]

thank you for this x

[Michael Oliver]

and the light shineth in the darkness and dark comprehended it not.
Oh the ache - oh the disappointment - it is all part of of our poignant maturity - a lovely portrayal

[magenta24uk]

Thank you for this review and thank you for reading

[Chandradhish Ghosh]

This would very good lyrics for a song...sweet and simple... :)

[magenta24uk]

Thank you for reading xx

[prodicallife]

OOuuussshhhhh!!!!!

That was so intense, the gravity itself is sketching out that, you have actually scripted your feelings out.

This is something what you have written when you gifted yourself completely to this situation. I am touched, beautiful way of showing an imagery poetry.

Wonderful write,

Keep writing good!!

Stay blessed
Prodical

[magenta24uk]

Thank you. I am glad you liked it. It was written when I knew someone in a very dark place and I felt helpless to get them back to the light.

[prodicallife]

And it much sounded the same.

nice write.

Regards
Prodical