Boys

What cynicism I hold

For my true loves,

My only eligibles. 

What seed was planted 

So fervently within me

That I only view them  

Through scornful lens?

I pray, 

Take this contempt from me

Like an everlasting bruise, 

At the convenience of 

Any passerby's clumsy or intentional bump. 

For all are not the few. 

Author's Note

Not a hate poem by any means, just a reflection on my personal struggle and thoughts.

Reviews

[The Nude Writer]

I'm sure the guys are all about you :)

[Not Your Typical New Yo..]

Hahahaha, us guys can be a totally pain in the a*s at times. A girl can easily hold a grudge against a boy who'd done her wrong, and she often holds that grudge against another boy even he's trying his to do the best he can to win her heart. I'm not sure if this poem is about a struggle of trusting against the boys, but I can understand why girls may have had a hard time trusting the opposite sex at times.

[Madeline]

It's true, definitely, you boys can be asses!;) but like a viewer said before, i wrote it non-gender specific because i think girls can be pains in the asses too! It is about the struggle of trusting boys, all boys. I recognize that for some reason i have this problem, almost naturally, and i need to be more compassionate because like the last line says, "All are not the few." Thanks for your review, you're great!

[David Scott]

You show a state of mind or bias here. Yet, unlike most people with a string bias, you seem to understand you may have actually experienced the exceptions to the rule as the negative catalyst rather than experiencing a broader norm...
Culture has a great deal to do with forming bias. So does trauma and abuse...
Very concise writing.
You got to the point and embellished thought without having to embellish words.
Great work here.

[Madeline]

Your insight is amazing, thank you for reviewing this. Culture does have a significant role, it can be hard to distinguish things in the nature v nurture realm though.

[Sectando]

I really like this! It flowed well, and had a good balance in choice of words. Not too simple but not overbearing with big words just for the sake of their use. Also, it isn't gender specific and I can appreciate it from a male perspective in regard to the same feelings toward the opposite sex.

My favorite verse:

I pray,
Take this contempt from me
Like an everlasting bruise,
At the convenience of
Any passerby's clumsy or intentional bump.

Love how I can feel the emotion and the use of words was excellent, from the everlasting bruise metaphor to passerby's clumsy or intentional bump which fits nicely in the context of the verse.

And finally, I enjoy good endings in poetry and you have executed this with brevity and grace. Good work, thanks for sharing :)

[Madeline]

Wow, great review, thank you for taking the time to critique it! I'm glad you could see this through your own eyes too, I tried not to restrict it just to female viewers, because I think we can all think this way sometimes. Again, thanks so much for reaching out.

[Sectando]

You're very welcome. I hate to be "that guy" but I have a hard time findning poetry on here that I actually enjoy. I want to participate and be an active member in reviewing other writers work as well but I won't play into the politics of exchanging pleasantries for the sake of receiving praise for my own work. With that said, I put in a considerable effort to go through and try to find writing I actually like on here so that I'm able to give truly honest reviews. So, after sifting through a lot of stuff I don't really care for it's nice when I am able to find something I enjoyed reading.

[Madeline]

I feel the same way, it's a great work ethic in my opinion.