Invisible

I walked through the doors to a new world,
People rushing by, that's when I lay my eyes on something new.
Your beautiful ocean blue eyes looking right through mine.
That's when I realized I'm just invisible.

Thoughts of you run through my mind,
Wishing I could call you mine.
Every time i see your smile I know the sun will shine.
I just wish I wasn't invisible.

I walked through the doors to a different world.
I look around until I find you.
Knowing you don't know me.
When I see your beautiful ocean blue eyes look right by me.
That's when I realize I'm just invisible and That all I'll ever be.

Reviews

[Samuel Clayton]

This was good, and definitely something everyone can relate to. It flows well and the words are simple yet effective. Very well done!

[Maddy Raye]

Thank you :)

[Mr. Lopez]

A typo of two but otherwise an interesting and heartfelt write. We are often invisible to the ones we most desire but years of experience have taught me that some of the most beautiful of people are the ugliest inside. Finding the right combination is the real trick. I enjoyed this.

[Maddy Raye]

Thank you!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Being invisible and unnoticed is the worst feeling in the world, I think. You have portrayed this feeling well. Good job!

[Maddy Raye]

Thank you :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You are welcome :)

[wolf5252]

in order to seem visible to people you have to stand out. i am very scared to do such a thing but everyone has a gift to them. your gift is writing poems. being a writer is difficult because people dont appreciate the concept and feeling behind writing. i hope to meet a girl who shares these intrest that are similar to yours. your poems so far have been really great but with the only flaw being in this strange character you wright in.

[Maddy Raye]

Thank you.