5 Minutes

It's like you've been gone for 5 minutes.

My mind knows that you walked out

years ago but every time

you come around and let my name

roll off of your tongue my heart

begins to feel like you left 5 minutes ago.

But then these 5 minutes turn into

hours, then days, then weeks, then months,

and suddenly I'm wondering what life

with you was like because you've been gone

for so long.

And before I can pick up the pieces and

try to stitch the open wound left

infected by your poisonous words,

you waltz in and remind me

why I left it open in the first place.

(M.S.)

Reviews

[Jack...]

Extremely well penned. I like the entire feel and motion of this piece. Indeed it does at times feel like 5 minutes when one who has been gone for so long knocks on that front door again. The heart does open for many reasons, but every once in a while it remains closed.

I am saving this one in my favorites.

[Maddi Snowden]

Thank you so much! I truly appreciate these kind words!

[Blue]

You have a natural talent in writing, Maddi. You wrote this excellent poem effortlessly well!

[Maddi Snowden]

Thank you so much! (:

[A. Amos]

Each word perfectly describes the romance... I admire your skills.

[Maddi Snowden]

Thank you so much! (:

[A. Amos]

You're most welcome

[Glen Yumang Manese]

has that feel good moments in the lines...
your occurring theme of 5 minutes...
and then the clincher in the last stanza...
puts everything back into perspective...

[Maddi Snowden]

Thank you! That's exactly what the last lines were trying to do so that's awesome!

[Glen Yumang Manese]

you're welcome...