old memories

tw: this is a spoken word poem that revolves around my time in an abusive relationship.

Picking up shards of glass from my bedroom floor

Am i really your princess? Or just your f*****g w***e?

Telling me i’m pretty with ribbons around my neck

Tighten 1, 2, 3 and i fall, like dropping the deck

Pointing out the slits from when the devil dropped the hatchet

Pleading “baby, baby, it’s just an old habit”

Like chewing fingernails or pulling out hair

I’m trying so hard not to compare

Author's Note

fairly new to this! i would love any advice and commentary.

Reviews

[Adam Adams]

Quite an honest write it is... about the pain of love and the pleasure to lust. A gurl wants her man to love-ye-lust her right not for a night but for a life, perhaps... unfortunately, sometimes.. she never gets what she wishes for, & always being toyed or treated more like an object than being caressed like a doll. Such an excellent poetry i get to read this night.

I am sure would be looking forward to reading your stuffs!

[macyblue]

thank you so much! and yes, it was very honest.

[Gee]

No woman should suffer at the hands of a man, no woman. I have a daughter your age, God help any fella that fails to treat her well.
This saddens the heart. Very well written Macy

[macyblue]

this means very much to me. thank you.

[keith]

nothing like honesty to ignite a new start

good on you

[macyblue]

yes, I agree. thank you

[asperatus_]

Pointing out the slits from when the devil dropped the hatchet
Pleading “baby, baby, it’s just an old habit”

this is amazingly written. i hope you are in a much better place now!

[macyblue]

i am now! thank you so much!

[Stacy Purvis]

Yikes! Princess to w***e in zero to...
Short. Straight to the point.
Intense.

[Mira]

I'm glad that you're out of this toxic relationship. And, this might seem awkward, but I'm there for you if you need to talk to someone. I feel that we're two similar beings, I can/have related to your writing. I want to see more, I'm interested.
Thank you, really loved how you expressed this one.

[macyblue]

oh my goodness! thank you so much!

[The earth (Titan maphah..]

underground poems...like them

[macyblue]

same with me! thank you.

[J Todd Underhill]

I remember I was new to this as well (Poetry) about 30 years ago, but All I can do is advise you to stick with it. If you enjoy what you do. You will have doubts and insecurities about your writing. But I assure you that this is a fine beginning. I host a podcast Coffee With Underhill Monday thru Friday for poetry and spoken word art. If you are interested in checking it out or submitting a piece www.facebook.com/coffeewithunderhill

[macyblue]

thank you! i'll definitely check the podcast out!

[wordman]

seems you`re in a rough situation

[macyblue]

I was, but I am not anymore.

[wordman]

good for you.you`re welcome