The Wind, Susurration

 

Petals prance like deer in spring,

Caressed by gusts of butterfly wing,

In evergreen trees the hummingbirds sing,

In tune with bees: love's honey-sweet sting.

 

The wind steals your voice, and whispers to me,

'cross diamond-topped mountain and sapphire-kissed sea,

Through fields dipped in amber and ruby and jade,

To strum soft my heartstrings with love's serenade.

 

Reviews

[Matt Sayer]

Now a winters heart, longs for spring,
There to be, rejuvenated, and to sing,
To feel the little creatures, within the spoken words,
To smell the air, of love's roads...

This is brilliant poetry my Mattie, (Mattie) means, friend,
In Caribian Dutch language... ;)


I don't know what it is.... but you have
swooned me away again :)
You're special buddy! xx

[Matt Sayer]

Your poetry moves me too, Elisa! You have something special inside, that much is clear :)

read moreYour poetry moves me too, Elisa! You have something special inside, that much is clear :)

Midwinters melt when the Sun shines so bright,
Cold hands are banished to the depths of the night,
The fog burned to cinders, the air filled with light,
The heavens descend, a love of pure white.

:)

[Matt Sayer]

Midwinters melt when the Sun shines so bright,
Cold hands are banished to the depths of the night,
The fog burned to cinders, the air filled with light,
The heavens descend, a love of pure white.

[Matt Sayer]

Posted in parts, because WC is glitching :P

Oh that's so beautifil

I wait... patiently, to post it again.... cause it got cut off...

Oh that's so beautiful

It's not you it's this site.... full of glitches, in our light....

Oh that's so beautiful

LOL, I must laugh so hard now Matt.... :D I wait again to post.....

Oh that's so beautiful

LOL, I give up darling friend..... I'll post you tomorrow... we are too magnetic ;)

[Matt Sayer]

Magnetic magic destroying the web! :P

Yep, yep and yep!!! like those 3 hexa's..... grrr....

See my horns? ;) they are growing... ha!

Another try:

Oh that's so beautiful

Everyone now knows how beautiful it is... ;) ha! I come back :D

[Matt Sayer]

lol :P So beautiful :)

[bobc]

MS...rhyming schemes need this...Metre, Metre bo Betre Bonana fanna fo Fetre Fee fy mo Metre, Metre! Just having a little fun making the point. Otherwise, good effort here...bobc

[Matt Sayer]

Thanks Bob. I'm going to have to read up on metre some more, to sharpen my rhythm. :)

[bobc]

There's a rhythm to a poem whether it rhymes or not. I just find...my opinion, of course...that it's almost required with rhyme schemes. It's kind of like in a song if beats are skipped...or extra beats are added...where you'd otherwise expect them. It's my opinion only but I find varying rhythms can work more easily in a song than in poetry. Just some thoughts.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Well is it possible that you could have one poem I did'nt like?I don't think so , again such a wonderful poem with sweet sweet images coming to my mind.You are truly a poet dear poet lol:) Would it kill you to make it longer? Sheesh!!!!!!!

[Matt Sayer]

You're much, much too generous Vidya! Longer? Ah, but size matters not when the words echo their existence in our heads and our hearts :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Damn I wanted more!!!!I am generous just the right amount lol:)

[Foxemerald]

This is a refreshing, flitting moment that seems to carry me as a bird's wing might. The splash of color and sparkle of imagery is only suited to a imaginary meadow filled with that, 'honey-sweet sting.' You painted up a glass orb, teeming with life, which we can enter into- if only for that moment

[Matt Sayer]

Thank you ever so much, Fox! The landscape may not be forged of earthen soil, but its existence is as real as the air that storms our lungs, and the dirt that stains our feet. :)

[Foxemerald]

You are very welcome, Matt. The pleasure is mine, for I love to walk in the world where natural beauty becomes part of our emotion . . . I think that humans must have a natural genealogy tie.

[Matt Sayer]

Well, whether flora or fauna, human or inanimate, we are all made of stardust, born from celestial explosions that spawned the atoms that coalesced to form our shapes and silhouettes.

[Eddie Davis]

Quite nice, it is very pleasantly visual. I like the compactness of this poem.

[Matt Sayer]

Thanks Eddie :)

[icelandicblue]

Susurrus is one of my favorite words to say...it's just beautiful that whisp whisp whispering on the wind.

I love so much of language in this piece but that sapphire-kissed sea is so inviting. Your poem murmurs with

the promise of blissful existence. It is a stained glass poem.

[Matt Sayer]

Thank you so much icelandic! I love that word too, it's shape and feeling on the tongue perfectly embodies its meaning. :)