That One about Icarus

Kind of my take on the viral ‘Icarus’ poem

If I should stand,

would you order I sit?

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Or would you say to fly,

my love,

burn your wings on our sun.

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Icarus was born to fall,

a mere fool on wax wings.

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Flying isn’t an option,

sweet child.

Burn holes in the sky,

Leave ash at your feet.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

your writing is reflective, metaphorical and quite creative.
The last stanza is quite impactful...although Flying wasn't an option for the Wright Brothers but somehow they managed to.
Children always surprise us...Wax burns slowly in a candle, but wings burn rapidly in the sun.
j.

[Amanda C]

Whoa, what amazing closing lines. They leave an imprint on the reader. I love it, "burn holes in the sky, leave ash at your feet" it's so mesmerizing the way you've painted the picture. I hope to read more from you, I am certain there is much more that you have to offer and show us!

[Vex]

This was the anthem I needed to read today. It says to me woman, keep going. And I think we all need a little more ash at our feet as we burn through the world.

Thank you for sharing this.

[Visions_of_Insanity]

Hello. Beautifully mesmerizing. Such flow.