The Midnight Masquerade

A birthday present for my dearest...

Standing in this burning sunset I wait, For the call of the midnight masquerade. Music begins when the hour is late, Alone I am, into the crowd I fade. Along these halls a head of blonde I spied, Standing on his own in a far alcove. Behind the mask were two glittering eyes, Ah, deep into that ocean blue I dove… The entire room of people dimmed, Around me I saw none other than him. My heart was sent fluttering on the wind, When he came to me and asked on a whim, “Oh, to dance with you is all I can ask, Because only you can myself unmask.” A voice lilting like than of a siren, Entranced me into a moonlit tango. Dancing on the wide plains of Orion, Wherever the storm went the rain would go… Before I knew it, the ball was over, And still I had not seen this phantom’s face. But soon my luck was to change-forever! For now he walked me out at a slow pace. I was stunned by this man’s chivalry, There was no way I could ever resist, As he opened a carriage door for me, Driving away into deep clouds of mist. Up the mountains to a castle we drew, Up flights of stairs to his lavish bedroom… Tenderly, he brought my hands to his mask, Crafted from the feathers of an angel. I trembled as I undid the clasp, Yes… for my composure I did wrangle. The angles wept upon this divine sight! With a smile he stood up and laid me down. And though resist as I possibly might, From his sweet lullaby sleep I had found. Into the land of fantasy I fell When I awoke, I was filled with dismay, My lonely tears broke this terrible spell, I was in my own bed, brimming with pain… But downstairs again that sweet smile I met, Sending my soul into peaceful quiet.

Reviews

[Syke]

Definitely not what I expected, and I mean that in a good way. It's a great poem, with good rhyme scheme and excellent use of iambic pentameter. Is it written in a specific style/form?

[Hope]

Great rhymes! Flows just like a serene river. Very good emotional descriptions. Heartwarmingly poignant!

[Guardian]

That's beautiful. Perfect use of Iambic Pentameter. I could picture all of it and I loved your descriptions. "Behind the mask were two glittering eyes, Ah, deep into that ocean blue I dove..." Fantastic description and a great birthday present for him. I'm sure he loved it!

[fotini]

wow......unbelievable!!!!!!!
it's absolutely amazing!!!!!!
i can't find the words to describe how much i like it!!!!
it's so good!!!!
this romance....this love the protagonists feel from the first moment......WOW
great work!!!!!!!!!!!!