sticks and stones

this is a personal spoken word that i wrote warning its a little dark...PLEASE REVIEW

Sticks And Stones

At two-thirty the middle child was born
His parents smiled at him
Knowing that with this child their family will never be torn
They gave him a unique name and had high hopes fir their bundle of joy
If only they knew what will happen to their baby boy
If only they knew that when the baby girl was born
That he was tossed aside
If only they knew that every time every f*****g time he tried
That they would compare him to his perfect siblings
And because of that every night he cried
If only they knew that when he started school
That he was bullied by everyone
Even by his own f*****g siblings who even now think it's fun
If only they knew that the reason why he never went to church and still will not
Because God didn't answer his prayers
God left him to rot
If only they knew that the reason the child never spoke
Is because they never listen to him
And for that his heart remained broke
If only they knew that the child didn't care if he went to hell
Because they are the mother f*****g reason that he fell
If only they knew after sixteen years of torture the child will pay ultimate price
If only they knew that the child tried tried to end his life not one
But mother f*****g twice
If only they knew that soon if this child is put through any more harm
The third time will be the charm
I am not standing up here to tell a tale
To entertain you and I am not telling you this to make you feel sorry for me
I'm telling you this so you can lend a hand to the ones who are depressed
Who isolate themselves from society
The ones who are in a state of stress
Letting themselves be infected with this dark corruption
Ultimately setting themselves up for self destruction
So take heed of my words let my words shake your very core
STICKS AND STONES MAY BREAK OUR BONES BUT WORDS HURT JUST AS SORE.

Author's Note

this spoken word uses a large amount of profanity but I wrote what i really felt and I think I got the message out loud and clear PLEASE REVIEW

Reviews

[Christopher_Myles]

Hey man (or woman), all I can say by reading this, is I hope you're alright. Just because you were treated a certain way by certain people does not mean that all people are the same... There is a world out there beyond the negativity of your childhood experience....

As for the poem, it gets the point across, I can feel the pain, maybe because I have had extremely similar experiences... Its a very sad poem, but the message is real. Nobody deserves to be treated like a piece of crap... As for the profanity as stated above.... It's understandable, it feels as if that is not enough even sometimes to convey the hurt and anger...

Happy healing to you.

[lyricalprince]

thanks for your kind words i took them to heart and im happy to say that i am getting better and i look at the world from a positive perspective instead of the negative thanks

[Natalie]

Your words are no darker than the experiences you had, the darkness must be portrayed else we give space to the fear we felt at the time. Pleasure to read, I hope you have found people who balance the light from the dark

[ThoughtsofShyann]

I thought it was amazing the profanity made the writing real and true and for that I applaud you the emotion was very heart felt!

[Riding the Rainbow]

this piece was loud and clear..
Thank you for giving voice to those who can't.
U did an amazing job, my friend.

[SpeedyHobbit Armstrong]

Bullying stinks, I've been through it myself. It's the worst when people say unhelpful things like "just be more social/friendly" (or say you have bad social skills) or "just ignore them."

[susieq]

Very powerful, hard to hear, but happens to so many, ignored, bullied, pushed aside, words do hurt, but words can also heal. I hear you, and I applaud your strength to get up everyday, and give life another chance.

[Megan]

An interesting poem. It's unfortunate that you are feeling this way. I hope writing is giving you the release you need. The poem itself is good, I would love to hear it spoken aloud. It's a common theme; "Sticks and Stones", and I think you managed to capture the untruthfulness about the full statement. Your poem is very relatable, and the reader can feel your emotion. Nice work. :)

Best wishes,
Megan.
P.S. If you need someone to talk to, feel free to drop me a line.

[Silent Wolf]

Dude. This is like speaking from my point of view, but I'm not a guy, and I've only tried once.

[♪Barklight♪]

Wonderfully deep and full of meaning. A powerful peom.