All I ask of you as a father

This poem expresses how i felt about my father years ago 1/9/04- i was 16

Sitting here, alone, depressed in my room

i feel pity for myself in my darkness and gloom.

I want to die right now but there's something that stops me

I want to make you proud, because no one else will adopt me.

it seems like everything i do in your eyes is just wrong.

But i've only wanted one thing from you all along.

I won't even be selfish, let me show you it's true.

Please be a father, that's all i ask of you.

I know i want alot, just add to the pile.

like saying that you love me every once in a while.

I'm not afraid of the truth you speak, but me feeling the pain

from disappointing you,  feeling more of the same.

but sometimes, you have me shook, and my bottom lip quivers

sometimes it feels like you want me to cry you a river.

it seems like you're doing your best but why does it hurt?

why does it feel like you treat me like dirt?

But i'll still take it and stay here, that's the best I can do

because you're still my father, and I still love you.

Reviews

[Flo_writer]

This sounds really personal and for that alone I can appreciate all that is said here. I've never really had any probs. with my father since I've never met the guy, but I'm sure this poem will help anyone going through the same thing. Great read

[Gheeneil]

You have expressed powerful emotion there. It's so sad. It could bring tears to the eyes. A father should have done his role without anyone in the family telling him that. It just breaks my heart that some have to plead for that. Isn't that given without conditions? But then again, the presence of love is so inspiring. This piece is just wonderful!

[Donni]

I just want to give you a great big hug! This was so heart wrenching! It made me cry. You have harnessed your pain through poetry, that is a gift, that can be your anchor, your drive. Let it be your healing. Thank you so much for sharing this. One of my favorites! Donni

[Freder Fredersen (aka G..]

Solid write. I felt it. Hit a few nerves with me. You really painted a word picture.

Cheers!
FF

[Lorraine]

Nice poem. I can even relate to it. Just like you, at some point in my life, I hated my father. It seemed to me that he was expecting so much from me, and I just couldn't and mustn't disappoint him at all costs. This pretty much mirrors what I felt before. Good Job. I specifically like the ending. I do believe that children should really love there parents or at the very least respect them.

Keep Writing.^___^

[Marilyn My Bitterness]

That was a really deep look into your relationship with your father. It must be hard to want that love and compassion and not recieve it. Beautiful poem. I can definately appreciate and understand the message.

-Marleina