the rythmatic sound

the sound that i grew used to

the rythm that played along my song

thats if life is a song

 

forced to join the choir

that choir that i wouldn't have joined

only if the choir stage

was a few miles away from my village!

 

i ran,

ran away from it all

but no, my legs could not take me to safety

no where was safe.. not when they needed more

choir members to play the instruments

thats if guns are instruments

 

i produced that sound..

it became the work of my hands

forced to play the instruments when i didnt want to

 

i became part of it

my destiny decided by the choir leader

i was in no position to make my own decisions

but follow those given by the superior

my life depended on my willingness to cope

 

forced to kill my beloved ones

only to apease themselves

they laugh as they see me shed tears

not knowing what to do

only 7 years old but carrying responsibility of a 30 year old...

 

 

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Author's Note

ok.. this is not from experience because some of you might think that i really fought in a civil war. it is always easier for me to write in the person's perspective like it was really me out there in the fields. this thought came to me one day when the fireworks were going on outside my auntie's house during a party. i was in the upper bedroom and i could see them hit the skys and then the sound clicked into my brain en looking back at the civils wars going on in the AFRICA with CHILD SOLDIERS increasing day by day i thought i could voice their feelings. hope you all love it!

Reviews

[khalid]

i really love it, how can i not while it carries such a message of peace and saving lives? as a person from the what is called the third world, let me try to explain how it is going. the leaders in Africa are just puppets moved by superior leaders in the developped western countries. unfortunately,most of the African countries are still under colonization. modern colonization is worse because you cant decide who is with and who is against you. the leaders of the developped countries want African countries to be always as they are now although they pretend to be against it. this helps those leaders to trade weapons which is the best trade in our world now. if peace revails all over the world, what would happen to weapons factories in the developped countries? that is why those developped countries try to keep the situation as it is. they threaten the African leaders of being unseated if they become not loyal to them..it is a really complicated issue, the solution must come from the African people themselves. if they dont get aware, they will continue their lives as it is now for ever. South African people led by Nilson Mandila could overcome racial discremination. if the people of South Africa didnt do that, they would have lived all their lives facing that racial descrimination. i hope the other African countries people would learn from that lesson because they are losing both their natural resources and their own lives for the sake of greedy politicians!
thank you for the nice sweet writing..

[luviva]

i totally agree with you
they have blind folded them with foreign aid whatever that they are helpin bring about peace bt they are just preparing their sources of rawmaterials that they will need. look there is energy insecurity right now. countries fighting over oil en gas en crude fuels.. who is gonna b there to solve the wrangle?? the developed countries yet they are not!
only looking for opportunities to establish relationships with our puppet AFRICAN leaders to get their hands on FRICA's resources,...
neo colonialism is everywhere!
enwe thanxx for the review!!

[Kyle Sky]

Beautiful piece. The message was strong.

[luviva]

THANXX :)

[Siren]

Beautiful. The metaphor is perfectly haunting. A choir, yet voiceless they are. I knew something was up by the end of the first stanza. That life is not a song, but a scream. Beautiful work my friend!

[luviva]

real nice review swtyy
thanxx........ loved this "life is not a song but a scream"
you got your own words.. am loving it!!

[Siren]

hehe....thanks. I'm always happy to review (:

[luviva]

an always happy to c yo reviewss

[de_maruf]

nice

[luviva]

thanx

[Ahmad Cox]

Wow, this is amazing and beautiful and so empathetic as well. I could feel the emotion and the connection with the message.

[luviva]

thanxx :D

[Ahmad Cox]

Thanks for sharing.

[DrD]

I knew immediately what you were writing about and you captured them terror and sensations of what is happening in Africa with a stark reality. We still have Kono and others destroying the hope of a continent with virtually nothing being done about it. I guess they don't have oil.

[luviva]

well thanxx for the review and i appreciate your visits...

[StayAnchored]

It is a great poem! It was sad but I got what you meant by it :D

[luviva]

thanxx J :D

[David Scott]

The write made me think of a child trying hard to put life in perspective. A sad reality for many childern in this cruel world.
You have done a good thing with this poem. Prick the skin of humanity and see if it still bleeds...

[luviva]

am sure it doesn't!!
dont knw where these people have put their feelings and hearts who cannot see that children need to be loved and cared 4!
and thanxx for the review ma friend!
reall appreciate it

[Frieda P]

Such a delicate subject matter, so distressing when children are involved, especially in this fashion. Our children should be left to wonderment and not the vile side of life, so sad. You portrayed that so poignantly here. Great read, although a subject that is so hard to digest.

[luviva]

well, thanxx for the review my friend!
really appreciate your kind words!!

[Onyia-Ali, Kingsley Chu..]

I believe is a narrative poem, I appreciate some of your couplet, it indeed capture sounds and musucality. Well done.

[luviva]

thanksss
i realy appreciate your visit!