life...!

this is about uncertainties in life...

 so i live because
i got live....
i count days as they pass by

when night arrives
i rest exhausted from the
day's work

when i spend all my day
waiting for the night
and spend my night
resting waiting for the day

life is more like
a rough sea..
with waves crushing
into each other

and i flow with the flow
of the sea...
i live today for today
and leave tomorrow
to be a day too

the pain of living today
not knowing what tomorrow
brings....
its sooooo hard to endure

its wearing me down...
why not live a life to it's fullness
a life without fear..
worries or even torture

live by choice
not by chance...
the course of life is
hard to follow....

so i will change it...
to suite my desire
for i live the life....not vice versa.

Author's Note

yeh ignore the grama coz...i dnt knw the reason! but read, love it en review... thanxx in advance

Reviews

[Ahmad Cox]

Yes so true. I actually wrote a similar poem with the same title. I really enjoyed this one.

[luviva]

thanks soo much!!< ">

[Damien Davison]

I really enjoyed the lines:
"life is more like
a rough sea..
with waves crushing
into each other

and i flow with the flow
of the sea...
i live today for today
and leave tomorrow
to be a day too"

Great work, very empowering.

[luviva]

thank you:)

[Anonymous Girl]

Ah! You just read my mind!! Lol..
Loved it!! ^^

[luviva]

thanxx...

[Anonymous Girl]

No prob!! ^^

[beautiful dreamer]

mmm it flows so beautifully. and it sends such a great message! :)

[luviva]

thank you...:)

[DrD]

The concept is excellent and philosophically sound. Life is like a rough sea . . . . . but a calm sea never made a good sailor. I enjoyed this work and the concept it brings across.

[luviva]

you r ryt.. its how you deal with the waves that makes you a great sailor.. thanxx for the hint!!

[Meallea Pomorette]

The "I" you used is a pronoun... You better make it a capital one so you're readers won't be confused...

"i count days as they pass by"
This one is my hobby...

"the pain of living today
not knowing what tomorrow
brings....
its sooooo hard to endure"
It's sometimes scary to live because you don't know what will happen next... But the mysteries are the things that make life special and worth living...

"a life without fear..
worries or even torture"
It's part of our life and life will be meaningless without it...

"live by choice
not by chance..."
They say what will happen is fate... But they still try to make their own choice and defy fate... But whether it's fate or choice just enjoy living...

"for i live the life"
Do what you want... It's hard to have regrets in the end...

All in all, this poem shows how a person questions life and tries to live it in his/ her own way...
It's nice and very realistic...
thumbs up....

[luviva]

thank you en the I, i will remember to make it capital next time.. thanxx again

[Meallea Pomorette]

My pleasure...
(^_^)

[Kyle Sky]

Really good. Life is unpreditable and you've mentioned it in great figures of speech. Two thumbs up for you.

[luviva]

ohhh hooray.... thanxx for the review and passing by.. really appreciate it