WAITING

life owes you nothing

it becomes an

occupation for those

uncontent

a salary earned from a lack of

motivation to leave

the canyon of

self-pity

with its sweet streaks that

tickle

every length of every nerve to

convince a person

they do not have enough

slowly rotting a

body from the

inside-out

an invisible vacuum

stealing

satisfaction but with

nothing

nothing to replace the gap that

is left

 

and so they wait

a sickly naivety that they are

owed

a debt belonging to

life

a fault of nature

to deliver

a commodity to serve

as transport to

a better

place

 

a place that does not

exist 

Reviews

[emmajoy]

'.. that tickle ~ every length of every nerve ~ to
convince a person ~ they do not have enough .. '

Tis true, life owes you nothing.. it's given, you're stuck with it. However, once a gift's given, surely it would be both foolish and thoughtless to put it aside without examining its reason for being.

Your words relate the start of breath, then - twist and turn emotionally, in some ways disregarding the positives! But, by the finish you've inspired touched thought. Good, yes?

[Alfred Kukitz]

Living in the illusion, there thoughts way behind, never catching up with the real self. A goner from day 1.

regards,
al

[Manasa.L]

very heart touching to those who run behind the time and money

[lua]

thank you for reading :)

[Brokensoul]

Life offers more often than not a handful of mundane hopes. The hopes that are futile and never to be achieved. We go on like a cart on the dusty road of life. You have expressed this futility aptly. The poetry makes us sit back and wonder why we are here and what is our purpose. This poem made me think and I loved every word you wrote.

[lua]

thank you so much for reading!

[Classestnine]

Very true, we come into this world thinking we are owed for just existing. I think this was a beautiful piece and I look forward to reading more of your writing.

[lua]

thank you so much!

[Tina]

Nice I really enjoyed this

[lua]

thank you :)

[Tina]

Your welcome, I will return to read more

[Lei]

This is breath taking. I believe everyone who desires more out of life has felt every word you have described here. For a moment as I was reading, I could feel the urge to scream, Yes! Once you learn the true meaning behind the breath of life, can you understand how to see what has always been there, true tranquility. Oh hi, I'm Lei by the way! :)

[lua]

thank you :)

[Jimmy Yetts]

Deeply insightful; precisely conveyed.
Work to be admired!

[lua]

thank you :)

[Bare trees]

We dictate our intentions on ourselves don't we? Some will choose to believe life owes them something for what they've been through. They wait for the universe to grant them contentment but it never comes. Probably because they block it with negative thinking. I like this writing.

[lua]

thank you :) i agree, one has to learn that life gives back what they put in, a difficult lesson but perhaps the most important of all

[Ken Simm.]

Stark and existential. Inpressive stuff.

[lua]

thank you!