One Empty Cartridge

it's so sad how passion can blind someone into rage. before they know it, they've made a mistake they can't take back.

In between your gasps of air
You cry the words that bring despair
You scream to me the song of lovers deceit
You point the gun at the one whose heart still beats
You stare at me with blazing eyes
And bury me beneath my lies
You let drip the tears of hearts true break
And the sound of racing bullet the gun does make
It tears through skin, flesh, heart
Sails through blood and rips me apart
My knees sink silently to the floor
And I let slip the words you'd hear no more
          "I still love you."

Author's Note

advice, criticism, etc... appreciated and welcomed!
~not sure if i like the title too much. tell me what you think about it.

Reviews

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

Title is good. Poem is really good.

You could even expound off of this and make it into a story. Well, the intro leading up to it.
Very powerful, and blew me away (no pun intended)

thank you for sharing this.

kena