Beauty and The Beast

I stare at you from across the table,
the two seats are all that separate us.
Yet those two seats seem like oceans to me.
I can't form a coherent sentence that sounds intelligent in my head,
how is it that you, a single boy can cause this much pain?
I'm sure its obvious of how I feel,
and I am almost positive you don't care,
but yet part of me still thinks that there could be a you and me.
My silly little mind has played another foul trick on me,
because let's be rational here.
Your the beauty and I'm the beast.

 

Reviews

[Vera Iconica]

Wow, thats awesome. A few spelling mistakes, you forgot to capitalize a few I's. A few gramar mistakes.

'I stare at you from the across the table,' Should be I stare at you from across the table, 'Yet those two seats seems like oceans to me' should be Yet those two seats seem like oceans to me, and 'part of me still thinks that there maybe could be a you and me' could be part of me still thinks that maybe there could be a you and me, or part of me still thinks that there could be a you and me.

Other than that, great job!!!

[EVERYTHINGyoucantelltoS..]

"..why are you getting a makeover?"
"...NO REASON whatsoever..."
'*AHEM* yeah..."

[Brandon]

Very nicely written.

[Kristin Brecoe]

That is a beautiful poem. I adore the allusion where you made this boy the beauty, and yourself the beast. but i hardly believe you are a beast.

[lilly wildfire]

nuh uhhh sarah, you're beautiful too.
and i most certainly know the feeling, but this is excellently written out. it's very sad but still heartfelt.
i wonder if this is directed at anyone?

[[untitled]]

This is good. I liked your twist at the end. I think this is a good start! Nice work!

[Natalie Lozano]

very to the point and sad. I like it.

[None]

Your poetry explains things well, a good way to express this situation. A great twist at the end here!

[distefano 401]

omg i loved that ending! beautiful poem, tied together perfectly. u did a great job writing what so many of us have felt.