Nightmare

Surrounded by watching scavengers

Prey among many predators

 

I look into the endless night,

Seeing nothing

But the pure delight,

Of the eyes watching me

 

They glow with hunger,

But never move

Are my eyes playing tricks?

 

I think not when I hear,

The breaking of sticks

 

Thump...thump…thump!

Goes my heart,

In my chest,

In a constant state of distress

 

How did I get into this mess?

Did I fail,

An important test?

 

But those questions,

You see

Escape me,

And all I hear is,

 

Just the howl

Of the wind

And the whispers of many

 

I try to break free,

But nothing will let me

 

My feet are stuck,

In the slimy muck

So I can go nowhere.

 

When I finally die,

I no longer

Feel or care,

Bye, Bye my Nightmare

Author's Note

please tell me what you think!

Reviews

This is somthing to be read around the worl nice job.

[Kazian]

nice poem, you got a real talent there...

[Taughtskii]

I love it~! It's really deep and spooky. It's awesome :3

[chaffy]

nice. i really liked it. it is spooky and described in detail.

[J. C. Koch]

definatly impressive :)
As always, i love how much imagery you put into everything

[HappyTaylor]

Wonderful!! Great imagry!

[Allison]

Eerie, but in a good way. A very creepy feel. Nice write ;)

[HorrorMaster]

Dark and I love it as well.

[Tina Kline]

Dark and spooky. Very well written.

[Matthew J. Price]

that really goes deep into emotions and it has a mood of i dont care... keep writing :)