Sound

a poem i wrote while listening to music, what do you think?

Out in the open

A spy in disguise

I watch I wait

But I don’t listen,

My world is already

The world of sound

That is all I am.

 

I am the whispers of the night,

I am the song sung

When no one is around ,

I am the click clack of new heels,

I am the cries

Of the innocent.

 

But that is all I am,

I am everywhere

And nowhere,

I exist all around

But where is sound?

I exist and I am a lie

All at the same time.

 

I am loved

And hated

I am choiceless

But a choice

Will you choose to hear me?

 

 

Author's Note

please review!!!:)

Reviews

This reminds me of a country song called IM already there.

[Allison]

Ooooo
I really like this one. I like how it metnions that this, sound, is everywhere but nowhere, and it exists and it is a lie at the same time. Very nice ^^
~Pokie

[Tara♥Undefined&h..]

My mom likes it too!!!!! :D ;P

[Tara♥Undefined&h..]

Beautiful, absolutely beautiful Mar... I am completely speechless... this is great!!!!!! Fantabulous

[Tina Kline]

What a great poem about sound. You describe it so perfectly with your words.

[Jeannie Wilder]

aha! wonderful! :)

[Daydreamer54]

This was a great poem! I liked it! :)

[Jeannie Wilder]

This is a wonderful concept!I like the variety of the second stanza, you went for a broad range instead of a pretty fine one. I think numba two is my favorite stanza. In regards to punctuation, I would just finish your stanzas, as in with a period. It will give it a little mroe finished effect.
Overall, I enjoyed it :)

[DBURKE]

Wow what a great poem.
"But that is all I am
I am everywhere
And nowhere
I exist all around
But where is sound?
I exist and I am a lie
All at the same time," This stanza is absolutely clever- I am everywhere but nowhere and all around but not tangible! Great work-

[Rachel U.]

This is probably my new favourite of your compositions. The compare/contrasts were ingenuitive, and your choice examples of sound were fit. If anything, I would suggest a little more punctuation so that it would flow a little better. Every once in awhile I had to re-read a line or two to make certain that I was reading it in the fashion that you desired. Great poem, chica.