Abandoned

Abandoned

 

All alone

With no one to hear or care

Everything had been thrown to the air

I sit and watch

And wait

Hoping they will show.

 

I check my email

And all my messages

No one has responded

I am truly alone

Now and forever abandoned

That is all I know.

 

Everyone has forgotten

The girl they used to know

And all I have to show

Is the memories

Of times once sweet

Now bitter with loss.

 

What was the cost?

Just my heart

Now darkened with

The hate

Of them

My once cherished friends.

 

I do wonder

If they know

That they left me abandoned

Lost in the perpetual snow

Of my life

Now empty without my friends.

Author's Note

please review!

Reviews

[Laura Storm]

Really good. The piece flows and really shows emotion.

[theludus]

I've read a couple of your pieces. I'd say that the future looks promising. You have a good enough ear, maybe just put a bit more space in between rhyme sounds, though given the closeness you've done really well. I like how this is, and also that it could have been a rant. In a way it s a rant, but there are the hallmarks of crafting. crafting is good.

[Tina Kline]

A very painful and sad poem but very well written. The pain of being abandoned by friends is strong in your words here. Wonderful job.

[sweetylee1994]

I liked it. Sorry for not messaging you T-T......lol jk. Your ok. ^_^ It was great. You did awesome

im sorry i forgot to rate 100

nice! i totally agree

alittle overkill dont you think?

[Krista]

It was really well written. I enjoyed reading it alot. I know how it feels to be the girl who has no friends and how it made me feel. I can relate to your poem alot.

[DBURKE]

This is a really good poem. You capture that feeling of loneliness and pull the reader in! Great poem!

[Alexa Aiden]

Oh, this is wonderful! I love the honesty and sadness of this poem. I'm sure many can relate!