Raindrops

One of my first that I dragged out of the rough. -_-

Raindrops racing to the ground, as if fighting to get to an unknown prize, but plummeting to their death,

And splashing into millions of millions of particles

I love to watch the rain,

Not knowing where each drop has been, or how old it is

Did it carry the Spanish Armada on the seven seas? or did a mere peasant wash their clothes in pure rainwater?

Roaming rain, rushing down through streams to join with others, tasting the salt of the sea,

Over thousands of acres and years, what has it seen?

Perhaps we will never know…

Author's Note

How to improve??????

Reviews

[therin]

Wow, that was exactly how I was feeling this morning as I was trudging through the rain to work, trying desperately to cheer myself up and appreciate the beauty of it. I love the Spanish Armada line, that just made me check myself completely. Well done. A light playful verse.

Two things - I'd be tempted to remove the "mere", revelling in each raindrop kind of sets up the stage that the peasant may be as important as the Armada. Given the title, I (if I was writing it) would have to fight really hard to ignore that S on the end... did you consider a final line?

Otherwise, really enjoyed it. Thank you

[Maan]

First as far as your question is concerned, you need to see the other writers, see how they write, how they follow up, how they mange their writings, read every kind of stuff, I mean EVERYTHING that comes in your way. :) You'll slowly begin to recognize the difference between best, better and good as there are no category of bad unless it is literally gross which is not considered in writing, I hope you know what I mean. You won't find such here, the writers express their feeling very decently and in excellent manner.

About this poem of yours, I would like to appreciate the writing pattern. Its unique and perfect in its own particular manner. You surely have the potential to write better. Best of luck for your future work and experiences here. :)

Maan