The Never Ending Rain

Mother Nature will eventually get angry.

She'll stop being kind.

She'll take us out of this world,

ruined by the human mind.

Eventually, this Earth will come to an end

smashed down by human hand,

and I hope, my friend,

you won't be here to see the world's

bloody death.

She's punctured,

she's been bled out,

and yet she loves us,

Given us what we need to sprout.

She's been gouged

and scarred forever,

just because the creatures she nurtured

can be comfortable whenever.

Eventually she'll realize

humanity isn't worth the pain

and she'll cloud the skies,

and start never ending rain.

Author's Note

hey! What's that? On your keyboard? *looks closer* OH MY GOD! ITS A REVIEW! I've laways wanted one, can I have it?!?!?! PLEEEASEEE mommy? Can I keep it?!
lol, anyway, reviews?

Reviews

[BrokenButterfly]

You might have been going for this difference for emphasis, but I think having the poem in ABCB except for stanza 2 (ABishAC?) throws off the flow of the piece. Other than the slight interruption in flow, it is nicely written. Mother nature is truly not cared for in the way deserved after providing us with so much... few mothers ever are. Anyway, very good idea/topic to write about and I really liked the piece overall.

Good job!

[Virtuosa X]

Think you typed "get" twice in the first sentence, but besides, i like this very much. Points directly to ----->Global warming.

[Sylvana]

"you won't be hear" here, not hear. (;
Ah, hwo humanity is ruining the planet. Good poem!

[Amanda]

I wish. Anyway, i think you should change because to so because(

[Distant horizons]

Wonderfully structured and i love the authors note too :-)

[Lydia]

Great job! I enjoyed reading this poem very much. I love reading your work! Love it.