The Spider's Trap

They crawl around on their intricate web

spun of thread made of glass

The prey flies in and tangles itself

in the wicked spider's trap

Author's Note

is this too short? Or is it a good kind of short, like impactiveness? (Yes, I understand that's not a word.)

Reviews

[SuicidePact.]

I agree, the shortness of this piece doesn't matter, it's about quality not quantity (if thats how you spell it? haha) I really liked this poem, it had a nice flow to it. Your choice of words really had an impact on me as a reader. powerful yet short peice. Well done SOPHIE!! you never disapoint!

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

I think it is perfect, sometimes what needs to be said takes few words......

[Distant horizons]

Nope, this is the good kinda short. Brief, but with impact, like the beauty of the web and the danger it holds.

[Alex Vidmar]

It's short. But it's awesomely contrite. Love it.

[Forevermore]

i like it but id like to see more emotion or more description. u have a way with words, ive read ur kind before. use some of what u felt when writing all of ur other great works. its not a bad short, i jus felt like u didnt know exacly what to do with ur own idea. still a good write. :)

[Hidden Happiness]

its obviously a good kinda short...even one line can express more than a thousand pages....awesome writing:)

[R.A. Youngblood]

This is simple and short yet powerful! I really like it..
Thanks for sharing..Keep it up! :D

[Emrick]

you were talking about love being wicked.right?.

[Sylvana]

I think it is just dandy short. The words all flow together, and to me it sounds like this has some hidden meaning.