Dresses of Life

Ugh, title suggestions?

The Earth
in her dress of folding,
ruffling seas
And velvet grass
And coarse, cottony sand
It swishes and folds
While she
Dances with the sun,
dressed in gold,
and her child
the moon
dressed in a white suit

She smiles at her courtier
He holds her close
emanating warmth.
On her dress
sprouts a rose
To her amazement
while she and her lover spin
The miracle of life appears
growing on her dress
created by the sun's love
As they continue to twirl
in their endless
dance
Life forms on her dress

Author's Note

It's okay, title suggestions?

Reviews

[IAmGhost120]

I love how you personify the Earth, and I love your use of language. The dance between the courtier and the Earth creating life is just wonderfully described. Very unique.

[Hidden Happiness]

its just amazing how beautifully you can describe the earth...its truly truly beautiful..and it kind of gives a vivid picture to the reader...really great job.
oh n please read some of my stuff and tell me what you think:):)

[M]

Once again you have a way with personification and imagery. I'm not sure if I like the last line "Life forms on her dress". It's rather passive for Earth and somewhat anticlimactic.

[Lina Grey]

The Endless Dance? I guess, I don't know; with my poems the names just come to me. My first thought for this was The Endless Dance of Life, but that's a bit long. :P The poem is really nice, though. Thank you.

[Sophie]

I've never been good with titles, sorry! Really good poem, well done!

[MandaBear]

I dont have a title but its a interesting. I like it :)

[Daniel Atkinson]

I've never been good with titles, but I wish I had one for you. It certainly deserves a great one!

[Renée]

O k what was the inspiration for your poem?? was there a muse?