Persephone's Flower

I made it up, I don't know if Persephone even created a new flower

In the underworld

dark and sinister

void of beauty

Hades' lair

Persephone weeps

her green world above,

the dark king

wants her love

She sits in the grove

of the pomegranate trees

where she met her doom

lost in the sad memories

Her hands twine in the short, grey grass

she prods at the earth

and a piece of green pokes through

she guides it up, to see its worth

The stem grows a bud

she watches it swell

and as she looks the top starts to peel

white emerges, arranged with little petals

Persephone gazes at this piece of beauty

in this dark, cold world

The flower grows, and its scent spreads

as it does her mouth curls

Persephone's flower blooms and thrives

In different colors with green stems

she is reminded

that in the realm of death,

she is still alive

Author's Note

I'm in love with this, but it kind of deteriorated in the end, help?

Reviews

[Odayin]

The ending is fine, I feel that if you try to change it, it may throw off the ekes age you have already presented to us. This has a nice little story line and a great lesson. It could be a fable or legend that has a message to remind others that even in the darkest times, there is always a small light of hope.
Great write

[Ellie Howard]

for some lovely reason this was a moving poem for me the imagery was dead on and i loved it.

[Owlgirl]

The ending is fine! It's beautiful, I'm a greek mythology fan, and this is amazing! Awesome imagery and great!!!

[shawlyn]

Hi Sophie,
Persephone was the goddess queen of the underworld, wife of the god Haides. She was also the goddess of spring growth, so who knows: she may have created a flower. The imagery is strong. I like it. As for the ending, I would leave it. I think it finishes nicely. Well done
Regards
Shawlyn

[Wild Willow Blue]

I love it, and I think the end is perfect. Great job.

[Kelsy]

I agree with all the reviews just like deerestlink.I really love the end line.Great write,vividly illustrated!

[Coyote Poetry]

"she is reminded
that in the realm of death,
she is still alive"
I like the ending. The rise of the flower create hope and desire again. You could of create a new myth with a positive ending. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Lydia]

This is so beautiful. I love it!

[de-oblitus]

I love the use of Greek Mythology, I think that that alone paints beautiful pictures with words. I also have to agree with the other reviews, I think the ending was just right.

[Alex Vidmar]

I actually love how the poem finishes. This is really good. I cant lie about that.