Suicide (Realization)

wrote this in algebra, as most of my poems seem to come from

lips kiss
and fingers touch
but the contact hurts me

lace clothes
light as the air
feel heavy on my skin

your tears
as they fall
make a noise that shatters
my eardrums

my eyelashes
when they flutter on my cheeks
scrape the skin
and I bleed

my pupils shrink
and the light blinds me
it hurts
and I know
of my failed suicide

Author's Note

I don't know where this came from all i knew was I didn't want to rhyme

Reviews

[Mazie Tackett]

Well when poems are this intense, rhymes tend to take away from the seriousness. I do write almost all my poems in rhyme, but only because its hard for me to find a flow with words without them. You, however, are wonderful both ways. Before I joined this website, I thought my writing was amazing, and that I was already ready to become an author. This is the type of stuff that stop that thought, and showed me that I have so much more to learn. I am fourteen. I started writing when I was four. This was brillant as are most of your pieces.

[SuicidePact.]

beautiful

[Inda]

This is fantastic and bit darker than your usual stuff, love it!

[Lina Grey]

reminds me of my failed suicide... don't worry I'm trying that again anytime soon though XP this was excellent darling, quite detail oriented to provide a whole picture like a connect-the-dots image. well done :)

[Andrew (MJ) Nugteren]

Well this is awesome. Made me think!
There are poems that rhyme and some that don't.
good job tho.
100/100

[J. F. Charleston]

This was really really good!!! There are pieces that have no rhyme that are really good. I suppose that Algebra class has something in it that gives you really good inspiration like I have in Dallas, TX. Every time I go up there, I get these really good inspirations for pieces. Thanks for the RR, I really enjoyed this one.

[MandaBear]

Well this is awesome. Made me think!