Stop

I won't be chasing pavements any more,

instead the pavement will be splattered with my blood 100 feet below,

I don't want dreams making my heart sore,

I'd rather just have the thudding beat slow,

and stop.

I won't be looking for the pot of gold,

I'd rather the clouds roll in

and drown that damn rainbow,

wash everything away until there's nothing left to live,

and stop.

I won't be day dreaming at all,

but I won't stay in reality either,

I just want to take that step and fall,

because I'm no longer a believer,

I've stopped.

Author's Note

reviews please!

Reviews

[Odayin]

Nicely done, definitely. Good rhythm and I liked the use of "stop" and "stop".
It's relatable, no doubt there, and you drew some nice pictures that people normally wouldn't think of. The way you described all the emotion inside rather than outside really turned out nice. Once again, nicely done

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I won't be looking for the pot of gold
Neither will I :D
Wonderful write, great flow and rhythm! :D
Loved it! 100/100

[Coyote Poetry]

Sometime we must re-set dreams and begin again. The poem told a honest story. Sometimes feel like we are going no-where. I did like the logical ending. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[The Fallen]

Awesome write!

[Pratik]

Dark and Gothic. Though not subtly put forwarded i actually like the style. There is a tone of acceptance and helplessness which the poem brings out... Nice write