Storm

The sea is smooth as glass tonight

the stars and the moon shine so bright

But I know a storm's coming

A shooting star lights the sky,

but lightning flashes in your eyes.

Your voice as you wish is light and laughing,

but deep beneath thunder is blasting.

Our hands are entwined,

but I know that hand will make me cry.

The bruises are healed,

but the scars on my heart are concealed.

My summer's been filled with more storm than sun,

You've been causing me more pain than love.

I want to leave, but I can't go,

all I hope for is that winter has no snow.

Author's Note

first poem in a while, does it suck?
reviews please!

Reviews

[Odayin]

Not your best, but still written very well Sophie.
I like the idea, and I thought you displayed it nicely...as usual.
I kinda missed your poems, so this was a nice return.
I lees my enjoyed how you included multiple factors of a storm and it was unique to include your reasoning for writing this, I liked it.
Nicely written, nice idea, you know to keep it up

[Becky]

This is brilliant, as always! :)

For the last line, maybe "all I hope for is a winter with no snow"? Just a suggestion, it doesn't really change anything except I try to refrain from using the word "that" as much as possible.

[afra]

suck? its awesome ....i love it ..well done

[Abbie]

Afra, you have taken the words right outta my mouth.

[afra]

lol

[Abbie]

XD