A Broken Bird Sings A Broken Song

Dedicated to Amanda, one of my best friends. This poem is about her... but... as a bird... yeah.

A song of hope escapes the lips of the broken bird

she puts her sorrow, her anger, into every word.

The song of hope she sings, but cannot hear

she only feels the sadness, only feels her fear

She is blind, deaf to the things around her,

Only knows what she feels, the broken bird.

Her song is envied by many a flier,

they just don't know all she feels is fire.

The broken bird sings her broken song,

as she flies blindly, fleeing dawn.

And as she flies into the night,

something fades in, her sight.

Then she hears the song she sings,

as she flies with her broken, mangled wings.

She turns around to face the sun.

And replaces her tune, for a new, happier one.

Author's Note

reviews please!

Reviews

[Odayin]

It was like witnessing a journey. A journey of such great representation as you use the sun and broken wings to symbolize the light and the dark, the good and the bad, and the hope and nightmares. This is a really good dedication, I think mentioning that helps people connect better and realize that inspiration comes from people in/and the world around us.
Nice poem Sophie

[Xx_Mizfit_xX]

A beautiful piece. I love the story telling:)

[Willowtree]

Such a sweet poem! I loved it! Every word used to describe the bird's singing was beautiful and descriptive. Great job:)

[IAmGhost120]

I did like the direction of the poem, and the rhyme scheme felt very natural and not forced. I love the use of the bird and the song; excellent work.

[Emrick]

the title is so nice so is the poem.

[Celestial Witch Child]

Pretty. Lyrical with good imagery. Nicely done.

[JanieB]

"Her song is envied by many a flier"..love this sentence. Well done.

[Cole Hayley]

I like this the most out of everything I read by you. its a beautiful piece and you are realy maturing into your comfort zone

[MandaBear]

First of all i want to tell you that the title is awesome! Your poem is great. LOVE IT!

[Owlgirl]

Wow, great job! Beautiful and mistifying, well written, it's almost like stargazing. Great job!

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the use of the bird to make your point. I like the description of life and song in the poem. I like the positive ending to the outstanding poem.
Coyote