Secrets are a powerful thing.. They give power to your demons... They keep the pain raw, festering.. They haunt your thoughts, always creeping in, taking over, and messing with your head.... That wall is one of self protection, fear, shame, but it also holds in all of the hurt and doesn't allow the healing and removal of the demons.. Add to that, the fact that family is involved, and you have yourself even further torn between loyalty, repercussions of exposure, and there is always that fear of judgment.. I know, from experience, just because you let a secret out... doesn't mean that someone will believe you, will help you, will listen, will care... It does evolve from a child with fear to an adult with anger.. You have a lot of truth here, told with emotion and conviction.. The flow felt a little off in places, but with something this raw, sometimes that is expected.. good job sir..
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
Thank You for your beautiful, honest and insightful words for they inspire
me keep to keep on .. read moreThank You for your beautiful, honest and insightful words for they inspire
me keep to keep on writing. You saw and understood what was in my heart.
Thank You for sharing.
Thank You, for all of you who have taken the time to review my work, and
share your hearts with me. I am both blessed and honored that you have chosen
to let me share my deepest innermost thoughts with you.
Thank You
Now an adult filled
with anger
replacing a child
filled with fear
These lines really hit me hard.
This poem is so tragic but it is so beautiful. The fact that she still can not escape even now the fact that she is still being tormented is what hit me the hardest in this poem, because just because you hide your wounds it does not mean that they have stopped bleeding. This poem flows with an ease that contradicts its subject matter and I think that is the best part. Your words seem very calculated to me and none are without purpose...So I can appreciate this poem for two reasons...the fact that is extraordinarily written, and the fact that it is raw and real...
Thank You for your beautiful and powerful insight. When I wrote this, I was trying
to show wh.. read moreThank You for your beautiful and powerful insight. When I wrote this, I was trying
to show what its like to be haunted by feelings of helplessness, anger and sadness
because of secrets. I also wanted people to have a deeper understanding of what
its like being torn between trying to save one persons soul or destroy a whole family.
The message I wanted to convey is that secrets are very powerful... they not only
destroy you but they can also destroy future generations as well.
Thank You understanding what I trying to say.
10 Years Ago
I think you did a great job in conveying that desperation and helplessness...So thank you for writin.. read moreI think you did a great job in conveying that desperation and helplessness...So thank you for writing such a touching peace.
It's about as honest as it gets and the authenticity of someone who is close to this ...
The family ties, always boils down to those family ties.
Do I let one person die inside? Or do i break everyone else's heart too.?
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
Thank you for your powerful insight and thank you for taking the time to read my work.
This grabbed my heart and I had a lump in my throat by the end. The feeling of utter helpless in pro.. read moreThis grabbed my heart and I had a lump in my throat by the end. The feeling of utter helpless in protecting someone that you care about is extremely impactfully conveyed. I also enjoyed the rhythm of this poem. Very well done : )
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10 Years Ago
Louise,
Thank You very much for your profound words and deep insight.
You got exactly th.. read moreLouise,
Thank You very much for your profound words and deep insight.
You got exactly the feelings of helplessness that I was trying to convey.
I would also like to thank you for taking the time to read my work
and sharing your intimate thoughts.
My name is Luis Santos Verges and I have a passion
for graphic design and writing. It is my belief,
that poems are inner reflections, "Soul Tattoos"
that are meant to live forever.
This grou.. more..